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graham Member
since 1999-07-31
Posts 60South Yorkshire, England |
~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Timepiece ~~~~~~~~~~~~~ I see a face, its ringed with gold It's all that's left for me to hold I wear it to remind me his memories still find me More a 'do'er than a 'thinker' clocks and watches were his tinker pleasure came from simple things to free a cog, adjust a spring He always knew how precious time can be His hair once red, turned grey, then white unsteady hands and failing sight where once was strong and bold came withered, weak and old He asked for nothing, that's all he had his final years too brief, too sad I knew so little of his life and less about my mom, his wife It taught me just how precious time can be I wear his watch, don't miss a day and when the hours slip away I look and see the faces that time and age replaces I promise that I'll find the time to give to those who's life meets mine the love that I missed out upon when I became an orphan son and tell them all how precious time can be ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ |
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Craig Member
since 1999-06-10
Posts 444 |
Graham The only criticism I can say is you didn’t post this one in the open forum to watch it get the recognition it deserves. Well done! |
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redwriter1 Member
since 1999-07-22
Posts 480Franklin, TN |
Graham, What a wonderful poem this is. It's obvious that you are quite talented and have insight into things that are so close to a heart, even a sad one. Thank you for posting this.. It's a keeper! |
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redwriter1 Member
since 1999-07-22
Posts 480Franklin, TN |
and back to the top it goes.. can't help it.. can anyone find a flaw?? I can't.. (smile) and I really really tried.. .. Wonderful every "time" i read it. Such wonder there is in the love of a child for his father.. unconditional it should be , but .. it's not always what we hoped it would be . is it? Nevertheless, it's still love. Even unfulfilled love or ..un-returned love... doesn't make "your" love any less does it? (sorry that just kinda slipped out) but it is a question..... In the words of the great Wizard of Oz.. " We are not judged by how much "we" love, but how much we are "loved" by others. I'm not so sure I believe that anymore...  as much as I wanted to...(as far as my father was concerned) But, recently, someone has made me start believing again.. and.. and.. I finally realize the meaning of "joy" and "love" and ..and.. sorry poets.. when I figure a way to put it into words I will let you know.. hahahha So for now.. I'll just keep on loving because.. the more I do.. it's starting to come back... more than any dream I could imagine or write about.. now THAT'S... worth writing about.. hahah (see the double edged sword?).. hehe Must be what that guy was thinking when he wrote.. how do i love thee let me count the ways..... (now we have computers... watch out!!!).... my hard drive is about to crash.!!@! (very unpoetic). but true.. love love.. don't give up on it ... I never have...(but I wanted to) |
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graham Member
since 1999-07-31
Posts 60South Yorkshire, England |
WOW..I hardly know where to start, except to say.... My words were true...that's me in there. But you showed even more honesty in your words! Please 'do' write about it, when the words find you. I'd like to see those words. Thank you for a very special response (smile) |
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redwriter1 Member
since 1999-07-22
Posts 480Franklin, TN |
well you could say.. you'll post more often..... (hint, hint). Don't keep us all waiting in suspense and anticipation (although I do enjoy both those things.. hahah) Keep it up.. ! |
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