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jenn991013
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since 1999-12-30
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0 posted 2000-01-10 10:53 PM



there were shadows cast
among the thorny roses
tears fell from angels
as they cried for you
the sky a caustic shade of blue
the sun dangerously hot and bright
people smile but not joyful smiles
more like evil sadistic grins as you pass
the water which once quenched your thirst
now only stings your throat as you drink
the once soft grass you loved to walk on
feels like sharp jagged glass
inching into your feet
haha she laughs
   can you feel her pain?

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John Foulstone
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since 2000-01-01
Posts 100
Australia
1 posted 2000-01-15 07:58 AM


Yes, I can, jenn. Welcome.

 It's never too late to have a happy childhood ...

Kirk T Walker
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since 2000-01-13
Posts 357
Liberty, MO
2 posted 2000-01-15 10:20 PM


Have you ever walked barefoot across a lawn (even the softest lawn)when you've had an open wound on your foot?  Well, anyway I like the image of grass of jagged glass, it sort of reminds me of that sensation.
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