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Littlewings Member
since 1999-09-19
Posts 62 |
In a dreamy sleep , I saw my love. We kissed a thousand sweet kisses and a million delicate moments passed in seconds. I woke up soon after the dream to find my room as itself , adorned in pink and quite normal.But he was not there. He was only a dream. I m going to wait for him to call , drenched in love and enlightenment , because maybe he had the same dream.For one moment in my sleep he was more than my friend. And in that hazy dreamy moment , I was more than just Erin , for once. But for now I will just have to keep dreaming. and live for the rainy night. |
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roxane Senior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 505us |
erin- this is so good. i've been waiting for you to post. i really liked it. i hope that you'll get some good responses. |
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Poertree Senior Member
since 1999-11-05
Posts 1359UK |
Erin, The unusual format and the repetition of the word "dream/ing/y" quite a lulling effect, and I loved the line "I was more than just Erin, for once" - so longing and wistful. Above all though I liked the short last line which, after the long drawn out dreamy lines above, was unexpected and thought provoking - thank you. Philip [This message has been edited by Poertree (edited 11-22-1999).] |
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starboards Member
since 1999-10-14
Posts 467longwood, florida |
Erin, I liked this poem because it was dreamy but in a "happy" way, i'm not used to that! great job! keep postin', ya hear??? ------------------ "If you love something let it go...if it comes back to you it is yours...if it doesnt then it never was" |
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