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Storm's Order (Haiku)
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Storm's Order (Haiku) |
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jbouder Member Elite
since 1999-09-18
Posts 2534Whole Sort Of Genl Mish Mash 
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The tempest rages. A careless eye sees chaos, The astute, order. ------------------ Jim "If I rest, I rust." -Martin Luther |
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Marq Member
since 1999-10-18
Posts 222 |
Order from chaos! I like this haiku! |
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Brad Member Ascendant
since 1999-08-20
Posts 5705Jejudo, South Korea |
Jim, I'm not being critical here. I think the poem sounds great and it does bring an image to my eye. But, Well, sorry but every time I see the word 'order' I think of Darth Vader shaking his fist at Luke saying, "Together, we can defeat the emperor and bring order to the galaxy!"  Brad |
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jbouder Member Elite
since 1999-09-18
Posts 2534Whole Sort Of Genl Mish Mash |
Darth Vader? Really? Cool! ------------------ Jim "If I rest, I rust." -Martin Luther |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Jim, As you know, I think this is a good Haiku, but it also happens to be the third forum I've seen it in. We do try to limit multiple postings between different forums and I ask for you help in keeping to our guidlines. Thank you, Ruth |
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Willem Member
since 1999-11-18
Posts 139Inverness, FL, USA |
Nice juxtaposition of the unscientific mind's apprehensions and the calm and calculating approach of a meteorologist. However, can a haiku contain verbs? I thought it is supposed to present a static picture, hence no verbs. Correct me if I'm wrong. I love this form of poetry but have never tried to write it myself. Willem |
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