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Poem: Endless Extacy, Forever Night
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Poem: Endless Extacy, Forever Night |
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Eaglesoul New Member
since 1999-11-17
Posts 3Atlanta, TX, USA |
The skies explode with a thunderous sound that shakes the heavens above Two people stand in the midst of it all their hearts pounding with love Holding hands in the dim lit night they gaze at eachother enchanted by the heavenly sight Sharing a tender kiss, they wonder how it could possibly be as perfect as this eyes shining like candles in the darkness sparks of lightning scream between their two hearts passionate thunder loving light, endless extacy, forever night. Holding Eachother tight they walk hand in hand oh how could life be so grand before they met life was only too bland. The thunder rolls across the sky, the lighting flashing so fierce if only more people could experience such bliss a love so strong as this. The fantasy comes alive no longer in faery tale books, a love so true it shines through to everyone that looks. passionate thunder, loving light, endless extacy, forever night. The time grows yet closer as they become one marriage in mind the nervousness floods their souls they realize with delight that it is but a temporary fright as they approach the late hours of this special night, laying together eyes alight they hold eachother especially tight, oh what a beautiful sight. Hearts burning, souls churning, minds swirling they let their love flow. An endless waterfall of intense passion pours from deep within they wonder if they will drown above their heads into this extreme love this love has obviously been sent as a gift from the gods above. passionate thunder, loving light, endless extacy, forever night. ------------------ -Eaglesoul |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Does a Love such as this really exist or is this a fantasy. It almost seems to good to be true or to be desired. James |
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YodasGhost New Member
since 1999-11-20
Posts 8Escondido.CA, USA |
In answer to JMLEE, I found this poem to be very deep and realistic. I actually feel sorry for someone who has not experienced a true love like Eagle is trying to describe. It tool me so long, it took many tries, But when it happned it was like nothign i could have hoped. And when it came crashing down, it hurt like i never expected as well. Be true to the words, Eagle. doubt can only hide what we want to express. Yoda |
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Poertree Senior Member
since 1999-11-05
Posts 1359UK |
I agree with Yoda - I know exactly the feelings Eagle is trying to describe and love like that is an experience to be treasured and remembered for a lifetime, BUT (as Brad would say) we are here to critique the poetry and there are way too many cliched phrases in this piece (in my opinion). I guess the emotion of the moment has kinda overcome all sense of originality in the bursting necessity to get feelings down on paper. Nevertheless, even if it was a bit over the top, it sure stirred some memories and if it did that I guess it suceeded some (goodness I'm even writing like an American now  ).Thanks Eaglesoul |
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