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Roberta Little Junior Member
since 2001-12-18
Posts 42beloit wi usa |
"I want to marry you." That's what I heard you say, "I want to spend my life with you eact and every day. I want to wake up to you, your smiling, peaceful face. These things I want for all time. And I pray, that God will make you mine. I was confused and I was scared, but now my head has cleared. I know what I want- it's you by my side." To hear you say these things to me was music to my ears. For my wish is the same as yours; that we should never part. I don't dare say my thoughts aloud but I hope you do know the love that flows for you is true. I hope you know that I too want us to be joined. To be together, forever, til death do us part. I want to marry you too. |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
What a lovely proposal, needs a little help with structure and I think someone else could help you more than I. nice poem. floria |
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punksmurf Junior Member
since 2002-01-01
Posts 37new hampshire, U.S. |
uuummmmm, maybe i'm just a cynical b_*_*, but think you need to stop reading cliched, cheesy love poems, they're taking you nowhere but the bottomless pit of ushy mushy pointless, i-could-never-live-without-you crappy poems, yes this is critical anysis. come on, he wants to marry you not read some cheesy, unoriginal rhyming poem about what he wants to hear, get some sense up there! this is marriage, not eternity, and don't give me any 'true love' crap, how old are you, and what fairy tales have been spewing this into your ears, and most importantly, why have you been listening?!?! give him truth, and usually the truth isn't an overly-tired rhyming poem about eternity and that andless boringness called true love. ~Me |
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