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roxane Senior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 505us |
we have a highly medicinal love that's why you're always taking pills we get too sick of being sad so that's why i'm always bleeding we've been living in placental paradise feeding off someone else now we've got nothing left to hate and he's given birth to us if you lie to me about anything i know it's just my sinuses and if i hurt your feelings anymore at least you have a drug to cure it join me my love, together we'll pour out our filthy blood get transfusions from each other maybe we'll understand better by the gallons, red wastes and maybe some organs we don't need my heart your stomach and both our kidneys our mother's gone to feed us hate and now it's up to us to call it love and deem it right why do we have to cut each other up??? ------------------ "Come night, come darkness, for you cannot come too soon or stay too long in such a place as this." Charles Dickens roxane |
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Systematic Decay Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1301That place with padded walls and funny people in white......... |
Good poem......I think you could change sad to something more descriptive though ------------------ "Despite all my rage, I am still just a rat in a cage." -Billy Corgan- |
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donovan blue Junior Member
since 1999-09-21
Posts 26austin,tx,usa |
Wow! Intense imagery... I like it's cleverness and creativity. The last line was perfect for unifying the poem. Thanks. |
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Littlewings Member
since 1999-09-19
Posts 62 |
Wow really interesting. I love you showbiz |
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