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I Never Got To Say Goodbye.
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I Never Got To Say Goodbye. |
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Hallucination Member
since 2001-03-18
Posts 419 |
" I Never Got To Say Goodbye " © 2001 Brian Eggertsen, All Rights Reserved V1: My whole life was built up around os two But so than suddenly I just lost you One minute you're here and the next you're gone I know I'm tough but I am not that strong It's so hard to understand That you're not here anymore... C: Got my walls filled with memories of you But it's hard not to break down and cry Can't stop these tears from fallin' in sorrow 'Cause I Never Got To Say Goodbye... V2: My life's a livin' hell so much pain inside What am I to do without you in my life You where the one I could turn to You where always there when I needed you And it's tough to stand alone Now that you're not here by my side... C: Got my walls filled with memories of you But it's hard not to break down and cry Can't stop these tears from fallin' in sorrow 'Cause I Never Got To Say Goodbye... C: Got my walls filled with memories of you But it's hard not to break down and cry Can't stop these tears from fallin' in sorrow 'Cause I Never Got To Say Goodbye... I NEVER GOT TO SAY GOODBYE... [This message has been edited by Hallucination (edited 12-04-2001).] |
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Shou-Lao Junior Member
since 2001-10-12
Posts 48 |
Song lyrics (which these seem to be) aren’t really my strong point, the connection between poetry and it’s musical cousin is undeniable, unfortunately song lyrics without a tune rarely have the impact of a good poem. “De do da da -de do da do is all I want to say to you” doesn’t quite match “Turning and turning in the widening gyre The falcon cannot hear the falconer” That said, with the aid of a little music, Sting and the Police managed to garner a far larger audience than Yeats ever could, it’s horses for courses I suppose. I think my point is that to comment on this piece as song lyrics without the music would probably do a massive disservice to your song writing ability, but I’d be happy, if you like, to critique the lyrics as a poem. Shou-Loa |
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LadySofia Member
since 2000-05-16
Posts 238FL., USA |
I thought I could hear the song in my head, but of course that can't be right...:P My imagination often runs quite rampant. I've seen alot of lyrical nonsense, dirt compared to this, make it big. The only thing I want to say is "I never got to say goodbye"...I kept thinking, "Never chanced to say goodbye", but that's more poem than lyric, I think. I really liked this. ^_^ LadySofia [This message has been edited by LadySofia (edited 12-05-2001).] |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
Hallucination, I am really sorry for you first of all as I have just lost someone, well not just, a year ago, but the wound is still fresh. It hurts, I see a lot of repetition in here, and I see it most likely is a song.I have also written sad poems and will most likely post them soon. what I would like to see here is a little work. Like who was it that passed on. a little more detail instead of repitition would help this piece. strbbux |
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