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September, Kansas |
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Ryan Member
since 1999-06-10
Posts 297Kansas |
September, Kansas Tonight, the rain's cicadal hum drowns out the howls of dog day humidity. Tomorrow, the falling sun will accent the trees in shades of red, like the road below. Sigur Ros |
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hush Senior Member
since 2001-05-27
Posts 1653Ohio, USA |
I like the opening lines... but usually I think of dog days as hot and dry, not humid... I kind of thought this ended just a bit abruptly... 'like the road below' sort of came out of nowhere, and seems like it should have some great impact, but I just can't make the connection between the trees and the road.... I eat only sleep and air -Nicole Blackman |
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Not A Poet Member Elite
since 1999-11-03
Posts 3885Oklahoma, USA |
Hi Ryan, I shouldn't have read Hush's comments before forming my own. Now I really con't think of anything else to say. I didn't have a problem with the humidity though. To me, the dog days just implies hot, sweaty and pretty miserable. Humidity seems to fit that mold pretty well. I'm not sure that abruptly really defines the end but something about the road just felt out of place. Sorry I can't come up with a more meaningful description yet. Maybe later. Pete |
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warmhrt Senior Member
since 1999-12-18
Posts 1563 |
Ryan, I liked the way you put so much imagery into so few lines. I agree with Pete that "dog days" are usually hot, humid, and sticky. The second stanza paints a beautful picture of a sun setting on a red dirt road. Nice work. Kris "It is wisdom to know others; |
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