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Sylphid on Stage
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Sylphid on Stage |
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sylphid Junior Member
since 2001-01-23
Posts 30 |
bare stage (lets stretch and imagine) a tree lilac stars and an apple “screw emotions in battle” I will find me an oak tree to lean on I will sink in the scents of scattered lilacs , And munch on Adam’s throat ..oh I mean apple.. In dismay I will swallow In reaction I will digest To my hearty burns…I’ll bring along my medications..’ignorance you bet ‘ ow My heart… is it I hear…in the silence..? contracting to sense How I wish …. but a false beat it was… For I dare any emotions To stay In perpetuity and pass bygone defeats mark its way in the flesh in suspense … If you wonder Its chivalry in genuine search I am really after Not the stars….dear mere And wait still, there is many coming chapters… [This message has been edited by sylphid (edited 02-03-2001).] |
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Brad Member Ascendant
since 1999-08-20
Posts 5705Jejudo, South Korea |
This is interesting - I like some of the plays here (and I usually hate that stuff). The irony of the whole piece comes through loud and clear. Perhaps, try to make it a little clearer - what exactly is happening? I'm pretty sure I know though. Just an opinion, Brad |
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Not A Poet Member Elite
since 1999-11-03
Posts 3885Oklahoma, USA |
Either Brad is a whole lot smarter than I am or he has some inside information. I'm sorry but you completely lost me here. Pete |
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