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The diet (whimsy)
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The diet (whimsy) |
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Lerk Junior Member
since 2000-11-17
Posts 49Dayton, OH USA |
The diet By Lerk He’d had it with his growing middle and decided to create a target a worldly diet soon begun to make this twofold person one In hometown turf of Idaho he stepped on scale at start in pounds, infernal dial that read and caused his heart to sink in dread To London then, aboard a ship running laps around the deck huffing, puffing, wheezing, snort too much in stone when pulled in port Aghast, flew he to Leningrad and swam the river dark upstream when shaking, quivering, out he stood in kilograms, he shrieked, "no good!" Quick to a local surgeon then through halting Russian dialect requested something now be done get rid my weight, for this no fun! Replied the Russian doctor, sad and gazed at him as if quite mad.. Oh, nothing can be done at all the situation ironclad The reason for your weight, you see, is something we call "gravity"! "A little folly now and then, is treasured by the wisest men" --Willy Wonka |
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sylphid Junior Member
since 2001-01-23
Posts 30 |
Hello.. Absolutely an amusing piece, if I may comment .. So taking him to Russia and England did not help much..? I wonder what feeds your thoughts. Lerk, loved it… and really enjoyed it to the end.. p.s I would have sent him to Somalia . |
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Lerk Junior Member
since 2000-11-17
Posts 49Dayton, OH USA |
hehe...I'm glad you were amused by it. where did it come from? believe it or not, it came almost whole cloth from a dream, where I'd dreamed it nearly word for word, at least the last stanza. It took a little tweaking, but I wrote it down when I woke up.  "A little folly now and then, is treasured by the wisest men" --Willy Wonka |
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sylphid Junior Member
since 2001-01-23
Posts 30 |
umm,I wish your dreams could come and visit, give me chance to see places, consult doctors, burn calories a bit, any time, any time Lerk.... [This message has been edited by sylphid (edited 02-06-2001).] |
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sylphid Junior Member
since 2001-01-23
Posts 30 |
umm,I wish I could acompany your dreams or have them pay a visit, give me a chance to see places, consult doctors, burn calories a bit, any time, Lerk any time .... [This message has been edited by sylphid (edited 02-06-2001).] |
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sylphid Junior Member
since 2001-01-23
Posts 30 |
umm,I wish I could acompany your dreams or have them pay a visit, give me a chance to see places, consult doctors, , any time, Lerk any time .... |
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sylphid Junior Member
since 2001-01-23
Posts 30 |
umm,I wish I could acompany your dreams or have them pay a visit, give me a chance to see places, consult doctors, , any time, Lerk any time .... Word move, music moves Only in time, but that which is only living Can only die, words, after speech, reach Into the silence , only by the form, th |
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sylphid Junior Member
since 2001-01-23
Posts 30 |
umm,I wish I could acompany your dreams or have them pay a visit, give me a chance to see places, consult doctors, , any time, Lerk any time .... Word move, music moves Only in time, but that which is only living Can only die, words, after speech, reach Into the silence , only by the form, th |
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sylphid Junior Member
since 2001-01-23
Posts 30 |
umm,I wish I could acompany your dreams or have them pay a visit, give me a chance to see places, consult doctors, , any time, Lerk any time .... Word move, music moves Only in time, but that which is only living Can only die, words, after speech, reach Into the silence , only by the form, th [This message has been edited by sylphid (edited 02-06-2001).] |
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sylphid Junior Member
since 2001-01-23
Posts 30 |
umm,I wish I could accompany your dreams or have them pay a visit, give me a chance to see places, consult doctors, , any time, Lerk any time .... |
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Lerk Junior Member
since 2000-11-17
Posts 49Dayton, OH USA |
LOL! well, this is the most response any of my poems have generated here, and it was by the same person! ha! That cracks me up. "A little folly now and then, is treasured by the wisest men" --Willy Wonka |
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