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JM4L
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since 2001-01-02
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0 posted 2001-01-02 02:28 AM


Love for Two

I can’t get these thoughts out of my head,
I have a couple things that need to be said.
I love my lady so much; I never want to lose her again,
Recently some feelings have returned, and I’ve fallen in love with a friend.
I have no idea what to do,
Should I be with her or stay with you.
I want to love you so much right now,
But with these feelings I have for her, I’m not sure I know how.

I’m sorry baby; I told you I would never hurt you,
Now that I look back on that day, I feel like a fool.
You might want to leave me now that you know what’s going on,
But I’m telling you right now; I don’t want to lose this bond.
Lord; please help me to make the right decision,
I don’t want anyone hurt, slowly causing division.
The words I’ve said in the past weren’t meant to be misleading,
Your love is the one thing now that I’m truly, needing.
I don’t know what to do with this love for two!


Love for two is what I have in my heart,
Having no idea what to do.
My heart, inside is slowly falling apart,
I love her but I don’t want to lose you.
What should I do, with this love for two…?



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Brad
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since 1999-08-20
Posts 5705
Jejudo, South Korea
1 posted 2001-01-06 07:26 PM


It's an interesting set up in that you're telling someone that you have a problem and that the same person is part of the problem but could you help me resolve it?

How does someone react to that?

It might be interesting to show us that and also show the reasons for the torn love through more concrete imagery.

Just an opinion,
Brad

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