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wonders (a lover's fight)

**lost**
Junior Member

since 2001-07-16

Posts 32
ma

0 posted 2001-07-23 01:02 AM

this was writen unknowingly during a conversation with my other, but equal half.

wonders (a lover's fight)

its you.
you laughing,
that knock out smile,
your sea green eyes,
with a slight ring of hazel in the middle,
very slight flecks of white in your left eye,
not as many in your right;
and beauty throughout both.
skin pale as a desert sea,
with a similar complexion,
to that of a hazey full moon in mid august,
soft and delicate holding all
curves in perfect form and sensitive to the touch
no.
its you.
hair is cloud-like in softness,
golden ripe wheat,
eyes the enriched technicolor of the sky,
but with the innocence and wonder of the universe.
no.
its you.
hair flows in lucious tangles of velvet,
crimson,
midnight carefully worked together
forming a new shade of life,
shaping about your face like a curtain of shy
and beautiful mystery.
no.
its you.
a smile white and pure as irovy,
the radiant glow,
the envy of the sun,
beauty brought out by god's careful sculpting,
a portrait of perfection,
demonstation of a natural beauty.
no.
its us.
our love.
a wonder to each and every artist,
wonders of the world.

confused among strangers,
lost amongst myself.
**lost**

[This message has been edited by **lost** (edited 07-23-2001).]

Great Below
Junior Member

since 2001-07-17

Posts 13
Massachusetts, USA

1 posted 2001-07-23 01:15 AM

The collaboration of both people in this poem is amazing, the images of both that tangle back and fourth and eventually create pictures of each. In the end both people seem to be equal and gain a greater apprecation for eachother, just how it should be

Wonderful poem, keep it up.

**lost**
Junior Member

since 2001-07-16

Posts 32
ma

2 posted 2001-07-23 01:19 AM

great below,
thank you for the great reply.

confused among strangers,
lost amongst myself.
**lost**

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