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Poertree
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0 posted 2000-09-27 01:56 PM


it's lunchtime in america
and throughout every state
the poet's great decision
is whether food can wait?

such eager frantic budding bards
with hunger in their eyes
but for not layered burgers
they're after kewl "replies"

so here when tea is nearly due
and dusk creeps down my road
I watch CA's languidity
just suddenly explode

it seems that words take precedence
which means that US poets
who dabble in the Passionate
are slim before they know it


© Copyright 2000 Poertree - All Rights Reserved
Elyse
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1 posted 2000-09-27 03:57 PM


    you, dear philip, are much too cute for words  
luv Elyse

[This message has been edited by Elyse (edited 09-27-2000).]

Poertree
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2 posted 2000-09-27 04:19 PM


"CUTE" !!!!!!!  GRRRRRRRRRRR  .......   ... (but thanks)

hey, and I absolutely demand to know what you edited in your reply???????  ...lol

the insatiably curious

philip

(PS still enjoying Uni/college ?)

Elyse
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3 posted 2000-09-27 04:23 PM


ok mr inquiring mind, i am, in fact, a crack head, and because of this typed in sre instead of are and only noticed it after i clicked post and so had to go back and edit before everyone saw what a crack head i was but now my dirty little secret is out thanx to you so i guess ill just pop off to the corner and hide.  sniff sniff
luv Elyse

ps  are you kidding?  dont you remember college?  

Poertree
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4 posted 2000-09-27 04:30 PM


damn ..lol... i was expecting some nice juicy insult (i mean worse than "CUTE" ...sheesh!) which you thought the better of, knowing my ferocious nature, and hurriedly (and wisely) deleted before i could unsheathe my mighty blade (or something  )... and now i find just an innocuous lil ole typo ..

ha ha .....my Uni days are a kind of blur - i met my wife!     

bfn

P

Not A Poet
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5 posted 2000-09-27 05:21 PM


Hey Philip, was that a vorpal blade?

Poertree
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6 posted 2000-09-28 06:31 AM


you likening Elyse to the Jabberwocky pete?!  
X Angel
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7 posted 2000-09-28 06:10 PM


I'm a WIMP!!!!!!!!

you are ADORABLE dear Philip
*smooches*
~H

Poertree
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8 posted 2000-09-29 04:43 AM


HUH!

first "cute"  now "adorable" !!

hey c'mon you guys this is CA - i'm lookin' for serious heavyweight criticism of the poem, not truths about my undoubted cuddliness ...  

what about some analysis of the complexities of the meter and originality of the rhyming (specially the last stanza), not to mention the subtle satirical commentary on post modernistic nutritional and behavioural patterns in a neo-technological society....

        

P

but thanks  

Dark Angel
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9 posted 2000-09-29 06:06 PM


Good Morning, er Good Evening Philip,

Well I really loved this, loved the humour  
oh and you are just tooooo  C l e v e r  
hehe and  C u t e ! ooops

There is a particular word I noticed you used in the eigth line. I'm surprised to see you use it hehehe, though it is "kewl" with me  

On the 15th line you have......

"who dabble in the passionate".... should that be......
"who dabble with the passionate" ??
I just felt that dabble in the passionate" didn't read well, but then it could be me  

awaiting your reply oh Clever One  

warmhrt
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10 posted 2000-09-30 02:03 PM


Philip,

Care for a little double entenre medium rare?
Clever, Philip, as clever as they come.  

Kris

"Only two things are infinite, the universe and human
stupidity, and I'm not sure about the former." ~
Albert Einstein

Severn
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11 posted 2000-09-30 07:58 PM


Hmmmmmmm...

Sweet springs to mind.
DEFINITELY cute - this is oh so cute P.

Awwwwwwwwwwwww...I'm quite weepily touched..


HAHAHAHAHAHA  AHAHAHAHHAHAA AHAHAHAHAHHAAH!!


Christopher
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12 posted 2000-09-30 07:59 PM


Awww...c'mon Philip, poo-bunny, cuddle-munch... you know you're too cute, so stop trying to get away with all that false modesty!

Brad
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13 posted 2000-09-30 08:54 PM


If one permits me a moment of hubris here and allows me to interrogate the hermenuetics behind what is, in essence, a hermenuetical excursion into the relationship between post-modern aesthetics and the ever enlarging obesity rates of the social construction we mistakenly call The "United" "States". Are you in fact examining a purer pre-simulationsit state (or position as a node in some technological matrix) of the "subject" as poet (rather than the poet as text) and his lack, his resistance if you will, to a conformist, capitalist agenda that in a sense creates an aporia between the quotidian needs of that same "subject" and some higher "idealistic" needs -- the need to present or rather re-present that same "subject" as a "free" "individual". If such a gloss is even remotely accurate (what is and where is and when such "accuracy" may find some redemption is, of course, another issue alogether), aren't you suffering from the same malaise, the same difficulty in etoliated communication, that all pre-modern thinkers were subject to (at least since Plato?)in that such a present was mistakenly believed to be always already there when in fact it was not. On the other hand, if you attempting a pastiche (I'm using Jameson's definition here), aren't you belittling the very physiological needs of an aesthetic in order to heiarchize the "subject" thereby perpetuating your own ideological commitments whether they be political, social, aesthetic, epistiemological, ontological, anti-obeisisticy etc.?


Or is this about cars?    

Brad

Elyse
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14 posted 2000-10-01 04:19 PM


ACK!  BRAD!  do you know that you sound just like my Com. textbook????  fess up, have you read Pearce???  because as soon as we started talking social constructionism and you said re-produce (which is chillingly close to MY text's (re)express ) then you brought in that bit about foundationalism, and started spouting Pearce's favorite twenty dollar words (hermeneutical, epistemiological etc.)  and putting everything in quotes...or...wait...ARE you Pearce??????  
luv the severely weirded-out Elyse

Poertree
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15 posted 2000-10-01 05:22 PM


maree

I’m always using that word can’t think whatcha mean  

“In” or “with” ...hummmm sounds much the same to me - I’ll change it if ya like?...lol

thanks M

kris

am i missing something here !?....lol

LK

hummphhhh

Christopher

*X*@#*+#%*X#~^* ........................... ~splutter~

Elyse

lmao ...... didn’tchaknow jim and brad are both Pearce clones !!

Brad

I’ll deal with you when i wake up .... ~grin~

definitely later

P

(Definitely not cars...lol)


jbouder
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16 posted 2000-10-07 07:50 AM


Philip:

I'm guilty as charged (except for the slimming ... I have a stash of poptarts in my desk drawer).    I'll try some heavyweight critique later (I eat many more of those poptarts and ALL my critiques will be heavyweight).  Later.

Brad:

Hubris?  You?  Naahhh!    What, exactly, were talking about ... cars maybe?  

Jim

Brad
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17 posted 2000-10-08 02:00 AM


God, I hope people didn't try to decipher what I wrote except in the most light hearted way. I was spoofing academic style -- Philip said he wanted something heavy so I gave him heavy.

Didn't Freud say somewhere that everything is secretly about cars?

Talk to ya later,
Brad

Poertree
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18 posted 2000-10-08 05:16 AM


HUH!!??  BRAD.......

whattttttt?? you mean i've just spent the last week wading through Jameson in vain??.....grrrrr    

actually i'm just formulating an apposite translation of your scholarly dissertation and will return shortly ... btw ..haven't forgotten about replying to the Maricel thread either ..just taking my time ......lol

yeah didn't you know brad .. Freud's g/f owned two big jags .......    

P


Jamie
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19 posted 2000-10-24 01:32 PM


It's not that they can't eat and think
probably more like they had rather drink



Jamie

Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil.
"Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely".



warmhrt
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20 posted 2000-10-24 02:36 PM


Philip with one L,

This is a very clever poem. I enjoyed it very much. But what in the heck is all this talk about cars?

What happens at lunchtime in Britain...all the computers shut down, so you Brits can eat a proper lunch?
mia

Poertree
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21 posted 2000-10-24 03:14 PM


Mia ~grin~

er........ cars???

ahem ........ ~blush~

er....... tell ya what ......

ask Jim ..... lol  

(hey - better still read "Just Wondering" by warmhrt ......bringing it to the top for ya !!!)

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