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Arpeggio and Staccato
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion 
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Arpeggio and Staccato A tenor to my soprano I am breathy, you bellow - A voice low and legato, Mine a spray of staccato. So many opuses you know, My songs, never apropos. A serenade beneath my window Dreamt of a timbre largo The window was non aperto, Would you take it from Da Capo? Could we harmonize in tempo, Arpeggio and staccato? © 2000 Corinne Bailey |
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Marq Member
since 1999-10-18
Posts 222 |
This is kind of cool! There were a couple of terms I wasn't familiar with in the second stanza but that's my loss. Nice post! |
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warmhrt Senior Member
since 1999-12-18
Posts 1563 |
I also thought this was unique and interesting. The only thing I might change is the word "bellow". The rest of the words are lyrical, and that just doesn't seem to fit in. Perhaps the word "smooth", or "resonant" would be "apropos". A change of a single word could really make this poem. It is already very good, and I feel the change could only make it better. Nice work, Kris "Only two things are infinite, the universe and human stupidity, and I'm not sure about the former." ~ Albert Einstein |
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Libbi Junior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 18 |
A great poem, which flowed incredibly well. It is a unique approach to familar theme, well done. I do agree with warmhrt on the word bellow. On my first read it seemed to fit in okay, though reading it again, i agree it does stick out just a little from the rest. Ofcourse, this does not detract from a brilliantly written poem! well done! -libbi- |
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