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Nikolette Sadness
since 2000-07-29
Posts 337port richey fl. |
this is a repost of my first haiku...because i really want to know if it is any good ~Change~ i began today live as love is needed by my change not yet seen. Nikolette Sadness i was once in love and happy...but you can call me Sadness. |
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JnR4eva Member
since 2000-08-07
Posts 377Bronx, NY |
in all honesy nikolette i am not a critque per se, i like to think of myself as someone who reads a proof and lends some advice...so with that said.... hmmmmmmmm.....hmmm the reason im saying hmm is b/c my undretstanding of a haiku is that u must use descirptive words, no adjective, no adverbs b/c u want the reader to imagine these descriptive words not so much have the author tell them to us...something like this.... tender soft-hearted imbedded scenery lush graceful innocent. now what i might have said might have been pure bs...but that is what my understanding of what a haiku is, and sometimes it is misused...for instance another property of a haiku is that it must not pertain so much to the physicall us (humans)..but to our spiritual side or emotions or...something that is abstract i guess...nothing tangible as us..those i believe that style is called senryu's... im not 100% sure but more like 95% sure  i read it from a poetry web site...but then again i was only suggesting  much respect< !signature--> "my love is my motivation my love is my inspiration perception of this poem is your interpretation" -- rlt [This message has been edited by JnR4eva (edited 09-07-2000).] |
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