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Event poem-can you guess the event?
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Event poem-can you guess the event? |
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Janie Member
since 2000-08-13
Posts 158 |
This is an event poem. It's an attempt at a structured, non-rhyming poem. Can anyone guess what the event was? A pretty boy scans the scene for memories long mute, when his name, voices praised and glorious was hailed A worn man scours the place lost, searching for his mind for when life, as it seems gave him a moment’s peace In the air, “sweetness” fills savage crying, the sky metal gleams floating by many spirits flying Bics glow like fireflies, dance in the dark alone Hell’s flames reach out for me, as thunder rocks my soul They mock, “Heaven’s on fire! Par-ty Ev-er-y Day!” Stone words upon our lips clap we, our hands to time Parting, we, restlessly, ourselves seen left behind Some scream that death they cheat yet we kiss them goodbye! < !signature--> [This message has been edited by Janie (edited 08-25-2000).] |
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JnR4eva Member
since 2000-08-07
Posts 377Bronx, NY |
well, i might sound extremely stupid b/c this poem i have read many times and i guess it isn't clicking what-so-ever..and i have no idea what Bics means either....i am going to go on a hunch the apocalypse? like i said i don't know im just trying to take a stab at this...i probably look like a fool now LOL...oh well tell me how wrong i am  oh yea the other reason i am in doubt was b/c and i quote "Can anyone guess what the event was?" implying it happened. so i dont know...and i was thinking of an airplane crash..but that seems silly too..i don't know. "my love is my motivation my love is my inspiration perception of this poem is your interpretation" -- rlt |
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Janie Member
since 2000-08-13
Posts 158 |
JnR4eva, You're a good sport for giving it a shot. I purposely omitted the title because I thought it might give it away. Have you ever heard of a little rock band called "KISS?" They are currently doing their farewell tour and my husband wanted to go down memory lane since KISS was the first band he ever saw in concert. (his mom dropped him off) So, being a good sport I went along. It was actually fun and I knew more of the songs than I thought I did. The first stanza is how I thought the lead singer for the opening band, Skid Row, may have felt as popularity for "hard rock" has declined over the years. The second stanza could represent Ted Nugent, the second act or any number of middle aged concert attendees. The third stanza...well, let's just say it "smelled" like a concert. The metal gleams, the reflections cast by the disco ball. Spirits flying...has something to do with that smell I was telling you about. "Bics glow like fireflies"-have you ever seen a concert where people held their lighters up? "Hell's flames" symbolizes the vivid stage show where fire spewed from the stage "Thunder rocking my soul" was the loud music I could feel in my chest. "Heaven's on fire" is one of their songs and they sing a song, I think it's called "I want to rock and roll" where after they say "and party everyday" Restless towards the end, wanting to leave, yet sadly leaving that part of youth behind, we said goodbye to the band called KISS. Janie |
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JnR4eva Member
since 2000-08-07
Posts 377Bronx, NY |
WOW...i was WAYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYY off "my love is my motivation my love is my inspiration perception of this poem is your interpretation" -- rlt |
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Brad Member Ascendant
since 1999-08-20
Posts 5705Jejudo, South Korea |
Damn, damn, damn. I was going to guess a KISS concert - the lyric point gives it away - but now no one will ever believe me. Well, that's what I get for waiting so long to read and comment on this poem. I would argue that you probably need to tone down some of the rhetoric. I didn't find some of the religious allusions particularly interesting. Thanks, Brad |
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Janie Member
since 2000-08-13
Posts 158 |
JnR4eva, Oh well, you were a real trooper for giving it a shot. Brad, Wow, so you REALLY would have got it? That's impressive. As for the religious undertones, I appreciate your comment. In looking back at the poem, the only religious undertones I find are the reference to "hell's flames" and "they mock Heaven's on fire". I respect what you've told me, but at the same time, these 2 references are important to my concert going experience. The heat of the flames from the stage show, though I was far away was very great and what I've written is my artistic representation of how I felt. "Heaven's on fire" is the name of one of their popular songs (that I actually remembered) and if I remembered that song, then I knew that this song for many others may represent "stone words" upon lips as I knew the song without realizing I knew it. As for the rhetoric, could you give me an example or was this a combined statement for the religious undertones suggestion? Janie |
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