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Andrea
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since 2000-08-13
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Dorset, UK

0 posted 2000-08-13 07:05 PM


WHISPER IN THE WIND

Whisper in the wind
I call to you my love.
For all the trouble and problems here
They’re minor in our hearts.

I walk by the sea
Thinking of your strength
Stangers we once were
But now we are two in one.

One, two, three and four
Problems seem forever more
But deep in our hearts
We know the truth.

Truth knows lies
Lies know truth
I wander around inside your heart
And find what I am looking for.

Ignore the hurt
Ignore the pain
It sometimes seems I’m distant
Just remember the whispers.

Whisper in the wind
I call to you my love.
For all the trouble and problems here
They’re minor in our hearts.




"Stop searching for something that can never be found."

© Copyright 2000 Andrea Selwood - All Rights Reserved
Not A Poet
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since 1999-11-03
Posts 3885
Oklahoma, USA
1 posted 2000-08-14 10:30 AM


Hi Andrea,

And wlecome to CA, I see this is your first post. I'm running out of time right now (and I'm not much good at free verse anyway) so I won't try to say anything of substance new. But, I'll try to get back later.

Thanks,
Pete

Brad
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since 1999-08-20
Posts 5705
Jejudo, South Korea
2 posted 2000-08-16 02:52 AM


Welcome to CA.

I don't want to get to specific until I kind of know what you want from us or if the type of thing we do here is really what you're looking for. Could drop us a hint?

The first thing I noticed is that you need to be more specific in your images - What are the problems? Why are they minor? Who is this person?  Who are both of them?  As a reader, this is what makes poetry more interesting for me.

Just an opinion,
Brad

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