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I almost loved you!
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I almost loved you! |
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SunShine913
since 2001-08-19
Posts 211Italy but from NC 
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I almost loved you I want to write about the waynighttime revolved around youin moon-darkened silenceand how the stars splashed across your facein silver shadows. I want to write about the way your whispersspilled from your lips like wineand how your skinheld so many delicious secrets. I want to write about the wayyou breathed my nameas if it were a song,and the way your laughterbounced off the skies. I want to write about the wayyour tears felllike broken diamonds,and how your breath gave me life. I want to write about YOU -of your beauty and how it transcends me.and I want to write about the wayI almost loved you... *You only live once, so live it to the fullest and have fun! |
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warmhrt Senior Member
since 1999-12-18
Posts 1563 |
Love it, Andrea...the formatting is great, unique...wouldn't change a thing. Kris "It is wisdom to know others; |
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Tony Di Bart Member
since 2000-01-26
Posts 160Toronto, Canada |
Andrea A truley beautiful peice of poetry. I want to tell you how your words come together and inspire. I really like the fact how in the poem you are saying you would like to do something and as we read you have already done it. The poem has both a past and a present feel to it because of this. I do not know if you intentioanlly strung words together but if you did I would change it, it adds nothing. beautiful really.... can I keep a copy? |
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SunShine913
since 2001-08-19
Posts 211Italy but from NC |
Yes you can make a copy i dont have a problem with that. and no i didnt mean to i wrote this one of the top of my heasd so no i didnt mean to string the words together ~~ thank you, you guys are awsome :exorcist:!~Andrea~!:exorcist: |
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