Critical Analysis #1 |
Guilty |
Elilas Junior Member
since 2000-03-15
Posts 20The Dalles, Oregon, USA |
I plead guilty to love in the highest degree. But my love isn't of lust It is that of the deepest friendship. Like the deepest blue of the sunset on warm summers night. It is that of the warmest passion of sweet lovers. Like the warm sand on your feet during a midnight strole on the beach. It is that of the stillest commitment of newly weds. Like the stillness of the midnight stars on your soul. So you see if loving my deepest friend, My warmest passion, And My stillest commitment is wrong; than I don't whant to be right. And if all this is a crime. I plead guilty to love in highest degree. Steven |
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Brad Member Ascendant
since 1999-08-20
Posts 5705Jejudo, South Korea |
You need to clean up some of the typos here. We all do this but here you can fix it. Well, the sentiment is nice but I found it hard to see what context this was placed in. What about going back and trying to remember why you wrote this in the first place. What situation caused the inspiration and then describe that instead of the feeling. Just a suggestion, Brad |
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