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deb Junior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 44Reading, Pa., USA |
This river lies before me Flowing with fever Vacuity has no space here... Its locution shrouding secret storms Changness occurs with every passing ripple Reflections of truth shadowed by uncertainty... Upon my heart lies its indifference to that which surrounds it As the moon rises to delineate the place that was left behind Torpid thoughts resurrect into time... [This message has been edited by deb (edited 07-18-2000).] |
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Elyse Member
since 2000-04-16
Posts 414Apex (think raleigh) NC |
hi deb! i think the kind of title you need here is one that gives a clue about what you're specifically talking about. always fun to do that. also, i dont think "changeness" is a word, and even still i dont think it works there. id stick with just "change"  luv Elyse |
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jbouder Member Elite
since 1999-09-18
Posts 2534Whole Sort Of Genl Mish Mash |
The first word that comes to my mind for a title is "Flux". This seems to me to be a poem about the elusive nature of "meaning" and our tendency, like Pellinore (their's an Arthurian trivia question waiting to happen!), to keep seeking in spite of recurring disappointment. I liked it. Jim [This message has been edited by jbouder (edited 07-18-2000).] |
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deb Junior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 44Reading, Pa., USA |
Jim, wow! you are certianly a deep thinker, as I am also. "Flux" seems to fit perfectly! I debated over this poem at work all day and was on the verge of eradicating it from my collection. The word "flux" has just brought the piece of work back to life for me!!! Thanks for this wonderful insight!! deb |
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jbouder Member Elite
since 1999-09-18
Posts 2534Whole Sort Of Genl Mish Mash |
Deb: Actually I think I am pretty shallow.  As for the help with your title ... no prob... glad you liked my idea.Jim |
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