Critical Analysis #1 |
It cannot be |
Doogle Junior Member
since 2000-02-19
Posts 11London |
I wish my heart didn’t leap every time I hear your name. I only wish that I could sleep, could live without the shame Of knowing that I’ve fallen for you Of knowing that you’ve won To be rid the cruel temptation to call you on the phone So I could hear your voice, just once, directed just at me And be torn up by the choice of finally letting you see That I think of you all through the night Dream of you through my day, Praying that one word, one glance, Might miraculously come my way. Oh haunting eyes be gone from my mind I know it cannot be. Your name across my heart I signed Yet I know it cannot be. Forget this man, quick beating heart, You know it cannot be. It tears my very soul apart To know it cannot be. [This message has been edited by Doogle (edited 06-30-2000).] |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
to want someone and know it is an impossible dream is hard enough...to be able to write abt it is wonderful.... |
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YeshuJah Malikk Member
since 2000-06-29
Posts 263 |
Oh haunting eyes be gone from my mind...my favorite line. Ain't this a witch? You bring across the tension in this piece well. |
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mysticharm Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 189Canada |
Hi Doogle I liked your poem, it can be so hard loving somebody and you know they don't share your feelings. I'm having a problem with 3 lines "I only wish that I could sleep, could live without the shame Of knowing that I’ve fallen for you Of knowing that you’ve won" Keep in mind I'm a just novice so I don't much where does the shame come from, there's no shame for loving somebody. What did this other person win? Never underestimate the Power of Purpose. Yesterday is history. Tomorrow is a mystery. Today is a gift. That's why it's called the 'Present' unkn |
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Doogle Junior Member
since 2000-02-19
Posts 11London |
Thank you for your comments mysticharm. To answer your questions, the shame is in loving someone so obsessively as in this poem, especially when its a very bad person to fall for, someone society says is "out-of-bounds". I guess there was a fight to not fall for him which he won, and also the sense that he was someone people were bound to fall for and this person didn't want to be like the others and succumb! |
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mysticharm Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 189Canada |
Hi Doogle I understand a bit better where your coming. Hope to see more of your postings. debbie Never underestimate the Power of Purpose. Yesterday is history. Tomorrow is a mystery. Today is a gift. That's why it's called the 'Present' unkn |
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