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Grace
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since 2000-04-30
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0 posted 2000-05-01 08:15 PM


Gladys and Frank what a pair
They had so much love to share
They held on tight their love was strong,like the magic and beauty
in an Irish song
They had a large family this is true,so there was always plenty for her to do
She always found time for a little fun,to show her love for everyone
A woman of wonder with a passion for life,an amazing mother,friend and wife
Her children are blessed by her love each day,no matter how near or far away
This lady's our mother she gave us life
Yes! Gladys was Franks darling
wife
It's been some thirty years since Frank passed on and still our family shares a special bond
So Mom from your family,grand and greatgrandchildren too
We hope all of your dreams have come true!!
                   M.G.M.
                    5/99
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[This message has been edited by Grace (edited 06-06-2000).]

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Brad
Member Ascendant
since 1999-08-20
Posts 5705
Jejudo, South Korea
1 posted 2000-05-03 11:31 PM


You've got a strong rhythm to this piece but I wonder if you might want to clean it up ever so slightly in certain parts. You've sacrificed some grammatical clarity here (although punctuation might clear that up). Nevertheless, it reads quite well.

This was cute.

Brad

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