Critical Analysis #1 |
Dance With Me |
erieval Member
since 2000-03-21
Posts 56northeasten pa. |
Dance With Me Hold me tight, dance with me love, heaven holds out her arms to me. It beckons me unto the Father above, so the last dance is what this will be. The terrible ravenous disease within, consumes everything that is good. It makes my body weak and thin, it's taken everything that it could. Let us dance across the summer sky, dressed, only, in stardust dear. Our love is forever, so please don't cry, just be my friend and hold me near. 6-4-99 "The grace of the Lord be with you all." - Rev. 22:16 "Oh that I had wings like a dove! For then I would fly away and be at rest." - Psalm 55:6 Erie |
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Marq Member
since 1999-10-18
Posts 222 |
This is very beautiful! Nice touch! |
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Chico Member
since 2000-02-10
Posts 67 |
hey, erieval. thanks for the good read, sorry, don't have more time to talk, but good poem, -Chico |
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erieval Member
since 2000-03-21
Posts 56northeasten pa. |
Dear Marq, Thanks. Dear Chico, Thanks, No prob, know what you mean about time. Erie |
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bboog Member
since 2000-02-29
Posts 303Valencia, California |
E~ Very pretty. Could almost be a sonnet if you wanted to stretch it a wee bit. Nice as it is though. best regards, bboog |
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