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tom
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since 2000-01-26
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s/w penna u.s.a.

0 posted 2000-04-08 08:27 PM



in every day, or in one
choices are endeavored
chaos created by ones own hand
from there shall be delivered
being the creatures that we are
when history's not remembered
it's condemned to be repeated
all have walked down this path before
or shall we sit at home
and further fade from zero

in any day,or in one
luxuries can be fabricated
apathy created by ones own actions
from there shall be inslaved
being the barters that we are
and nursery rhymes not heeded
jack fell down and broke his crown
we all came tumbling after
or shall we just look away
and further fall from zero

  tom



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bboog
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since 2000-02-29
Posts 303
Valencia, California
1 posted 2000-04-09 12:38 PM


Tom,
  I liked the thought behind this one and somehow heard a recipe talking in the back of my head.
  Example:
To make choice cookies, use
chaos created by ones own hand
history's not remembered
sit at home
Don't know if this helps you or not.
best regards,
bboog

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