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An MTV Affair
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An MTV Affair |
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bboog Member
since 2000-02-29
Posts 303Valencia, California |
A gala affair. Wil Smith, music, limosines. Everybody gettin' jiggy wid it Until Out of nowhere Two mothers appeared together. The MTV crowd stopped and stared. One, mother of Tupak Shakur, (who'd been gunned down in a drive-by in Vegas and had died in a neon-lit glare Sept. 7, 1996.) The other, the mother of Christopher Wallace, AKA, Biggy Smalls and The Notorious B.I.G (who'd died in L.A. on March 9, 1997, in a rap song rhythm of bullets.) Two mothers, holding hands East coast, west coast begging people to solve their anger other than killing or things will just continue. Over ten million toilets flushed in TV land Young people everywhere grinned Peace out y'all fingers went the audience. It was a gala affair. And no one seemed to care. [This message has been edited by bboog (edited 04-06-2000).] |
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tom Member
since 2000-01-26
Posts 90s/w penna u.s.a. |
bboog Classic theme in todays words,interesting. You pulled it off well. Question--what is,"fingers like the audience"? Also I think it's gettin jiggy wid it,though,I may be wrong. tom |
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bboog Member
since 2000-02-29
Posts 303Valencia, California |
Tom, Thanks for the suggestions and the read. I appreciate and welcome your input. best regards, bboog [This message has been edited by bboog (edited 04-06-2000).] |
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warmhrt Senior Member
since 1999-12-18
Posts 1563 |
Hi bboog, This was a very unique piece of work. It speaks so much of some of the problems in our society. Human life has been so very much devalued. You said it very nicely. Kris the poet's pen...gives to airy nothing A local habitation and a name ~ Shakespeare |
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Brad Member Ascendant
since 1999-08-20
Posts 5705Jejudo, South Korea |
Briliant. Absoulutely brilliant. It's the first one of yours that I actually feel. I don't do short comments well (unless I'm angry) but you got me on this one. Brad |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
b. boog, just dropped in to see what I could learn in good old CA...this poem is excellent, for several reasons...first being its unique style, second being its subject matter... very cool, "very politically correct" with a subtle but profound statement in its message and ending. only compliments here, as I dont feel qualified to give critique. just wanted you to know this poem got my attention. great job. take care,jm |
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bboog Member
since 2000-02-29
Posts 303Valencia, California |
To Kris, Brad & JM~, Thanks for taking your time to read and comment on this poem. Hopefully others may be able to pass along the message of it. best regards, bboog |
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jbouder Member Elite
since 1999-09-18
Posts 2534Whole Sort Of Genl Mish Mash |
Bob: Thank you, thank you, thank you. This is a strong piece and I, like Brad, am short of words. "Over ten million toilets flushed in TV land" is a priceless line ... adding insult to the injury caused by the apathetic masses. To fend off a rant, I'm just going to have to say great job. Jim |
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tom Member
since 2000-01-26
Posts 90s/w penna u.s.a. |
bboog Sorry, I typoed, its "jiggy wit it" tom |
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bboog Member
since 2000-02-29
Posts 303Valencia, California |
To Jim and Tom, Thanks for reading and commenting. I appreciate it! best regards, bboog |
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Gonzalo Junior Member
since 2000-04-08
Posts 44MI |
I love this poem. We need as many reminders as possible about how short the attention span of our collective conscious has become. |
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bboog Member
since 2000-02-29
Posts 303Valencia, California |
Hi Gonz~, Thank you for your kind words and taking your time to read the poem. best regards, bboog |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
bboog ... I fail to see how this relates to poetry ... to me it reads more like a recent events history assignment The reference to toilets flushing has been done countless times in the news I would strongly recommend removing that line but this is only my opinion of course Best of luck Rex |
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bboog Member
since 2000-02-29
Posts 303Valencia, California |
Rex~ Thanks for taking your time to read and respond. The piece is thought provoking, so it's OK if it's not your "cuppa" tea. Again, thanks for your remarks. best regards, bboog |
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