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haze
Senior Member
since 1999-11-03
Posts 528
Bethlehem, PA USA

0 posted 2000-03-21 04:05 PM


Tuesdays at the coffee shop
are always special.
Professor Philips
stirs his coffee cold
and aligns himself
like a second planet
with the door.

My face framed
by glass excites him
and he stands
raising Caine; Raising
the rafters with lyrics
torn from Corso

and Oh, he beams. Oh-
"Paris City, April City"

Usually
I smile, die trying
to fade. But today
is not the day.
My head hurts.
There's a canopy
of gray inciting
claustrophobic
tension.

I cross the room
in an elipse
of fragmented scent.
Opium, by damn.
He smiles broader
forces the down
pouring
Hey Professor
Give it a rest.
This isn't Paris,
it's Pennsylvania
and it's a Tuesday
cold in March.

But he goes on anyway
"oh Paris City, April City"
and I smile
to spite the season
in the state of Pennsylvania
at a coffee shop
in March.



[This message has been edited by haze (edited 03-21-2000).]

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Elizabeth Santos
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269
Pennsylvania
1 posted 2000-03-21 04:23 PM


haze,
This was DELIGHTFUL, having just come in from the piercing damp cold, and now to a cup of coffee. I glace around the kitchen to make sure Professor Philips isn't there.
Enjoyed this much.
Elizabeth

Local Rebel
Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767
Southern Abstentia
2 posted 2000-03-21 05:00 PM


Very punctual haze...  punctuation too...

I cross thee room in an elipse of fragmented scent...

now dat be po tree!!! poet..!

bboog
Member
since 2000-02-29
Posts 303
Valencia, California
3 posted 2000-03-21 06:12 PM


H~
I like these kinds of poems. A snapshot of a moment in time. I like the "elispse of fragmented scent". "Now dat be po tree" is a classic response too. Reb, you should make T-shirts with that line on them.
best regards,
bboog

Tony Di Bart
Member
since 2000-01-26
Posts 160
Toronto, Canada
4 posted 2000-03-21 07:56 PM


Hello Haze

Great read.  I have really enjoyed your poetry.   I think that you have a definite style, voice etc what ever you want to call it.  

The stream of consciousness is great. THere is only one line that I do not get or seems out of place and that is.

Opium, by damn.

Thanks for the read

patchoulipumpkin
Member
since 2000-01-01
Posts 196
Bermuda
5 posted 2000-03-21 08:23 PM


I really enjoyed this, a nice mixture of emotions, and i can understand the grey feelings of winter and how it can depress.  I agree with Tony i didn't quite get the opium line, it threw me a bit, but the opening stanza is brilliant

Professor Philips
stirs his coffee cold
and aligns himself
like a second planet
with the door

.Thanks for the read.

Marc

tom
Member
since 2000-01-26
Posts 90
s/w penna u.s.a.
6 posted 2000-03-21 09:10 PM


This is the day to day poetry that I like. A
second in a life told in great detail.
Hats off!!!
Opium,the fragrance or "the fragmented scent"

haze
Senior Member
since 1999-11-03
Posts 528
Bethlehem, PA USA
7 posted 2000-03-22 01:41 PM


Thank You My friends-Thank You Thank You

for enjoying my ennui in my
miserable
caved-in
March-of Madness
Life.
Oh and so it goes. I thought someone would hack this around for me but...no?

Anyway-to me-the opium
fragmented fragrance is like the ennui.
Apparently
opium (although first hand is not known)
is the base for morphine (which was given to me in the hospital at one point).
Anyway-it is supposed to instill a dream like quality-a ladada type of floating.
Well ennui is like that (sometimes)
and The Professor does this constantly.
Okay-he's old, but-he seeks to incite me by reciting outload.  Back to Opium
my fragrance of choice-he says actually
"opium, by damn" and I fixed it to the ennui.

Does this make any sense? To anybody except me?

Anyway
Big Thankies Again Guys!
TA
~haze


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