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Tuesday Defined |
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haze Senior Member
since 1999-11-03
Posts 528Bethlehem, PA USA 
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Tuesdays at the coffee shop are always special. Professor Philips stirs his coffee cold and aligns himself like a second planet with the door. My face framed by glass excites him and he stands raising Caine; Raising the rafters with lyrics torn from Corso and Oh, he beams. Oh- "Paris City, April City" Usually I smile, die trying to fade. But today is not the day. My head hurts. There's a canopy of gray inciting claustrophobic tension. I cross the room in an elipse of fragmented scent. Opium, by damn. He smiles broader forces the down pouring Hey Professor Give it a rest. This isn't Paris, it's Pennsylvania and it's a Tuesday cold in March. But he goes on anyway "oh Paris City, April City" and I smile to spite the season in the state of Pennsylvania at a coffee shop in March. [This message has been edited by haze (edited 03-21-2000).] |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
haze, This was DELIGHTFUL, having just come in from the piercing damp cold, and now to a cup of coffee. I glace around the kitchen to make sure Professor Philips isn't there. Enjoyed this much. Elizabeth |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
Very punctual haze... punctuation too... I cross thee room in an elipse of fragmented scent... now dat be po tree!!! poet..! |
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bboog Member
since 2000-02-29
Posts 303Valencia, California |
H~ I like these kinds of poems. A snapshot of a moment in time. I like the "elispse of fragmented scent". "Now dat be po tree" is a classic response too. Reb, you should make T-shirts with that line on them. best regards, bboog |
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Tony Di Bart Member
since 2000-01-26
Posts 160Toronto, Canada |
Hello Haze Great read. I have really enjoyed your poetry. I think that you have a definite style, voice etc what ever you want to call it. The stream of consciousness is great. THere is only one line that I do not get or seems out of place and that is. Opium, by damn. Thanks for the read |
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patchoulipumpkin Member
since 2000-01-01
Posts 196Bermuda |
I really enjoyed this, a nice mixture of emotions, and i can understand the grey feelings of winter and how it can depress. I agree with Tony i didn't quite get the opium line, it threw me a bit, but the opening stanza is brilliant Professor Philips stirs his coffee cold and aligns himself like a second planet with the door .Thanks for the read. Marc |
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tom Member
since 2000-01-26
Posts 90s/w penna u.s.a. |
This is the day to day poetry that I like. A second in a life told in great detail. Hats off!!! Opium,the fragrance or "the fragmented scent" |
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haze Senior Member
since 1999-11-03
Posts 528Bethlehem, PA USA |
Thank You My friends-Thank You Thank You for enjoying my ennui in my miserable caved-in March-of Madness Life. Oh and so it goes. I thought someone would hack this around for me but...no? Anyway-to me-the opium fragmented fragrance is like the ennui. Apparently opium (although first hand is not known) is the base for morphine (which was given to me in the hospital at one point). Anyway-it is supposed to instill a dream like quality-a ladada type of floating. Well ennui is like that (sometimes) and The Professor does this constantly. Okay-he's old, but-he seeks to incite me by reciting outload. Back to Opium my fragrance of choice-he says actually "opium, by damn" and I fixed it to the ennui. Does this make any sense? To anybody except me? Anyway Big Thankies Again Guys! TA ~haze |
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