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faith
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since 2000-01-31
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0 posted 2000-02-02 09:15 AM


Silent acid rain you owe me nothing ,
For the last time you emerged it bought only pain,
When your ran through those hidden valleys of my very being,
You lit me up on fire, I was wiped away clean.

Silent acid rain your owe me nothing,
I stopped loving you ages ago,
Your touch is darkness , a slow poison,
Your  beauty is gone ,your winds have grown slow,
Like old  times , now, when you catch me by surprise ,
Cool tears on my dead skin feeds me only lies,

Silent acid rain your owe me nothing,
I gave away my secrets, naïve I was , only to feel shame,
Moonlight whispers , shared agonies is all a bleak past , nothing's the same.
The last time  you  came ,a stranger you seemed, for my soul you killed!
A saint  you  are called , pure and gentle , but you  too have secretly sinned,


Ooh silent acid rain….in your glassy dreamy structure blood is all I see,
You had me dreaming . longing for love , but hate was all you reaped,
Years ago when you came , you brought gifts of hope and smiles,
Now  as those dark clouds gather …fierce and hungry,
My salvation , today , once again dies..


Oh silent acid rain , you owe me nothing…
For once long ago ,  your soft feathery touch ,  gave me life,  wanting more of your fiery  feel,
You have lost your magic , your holy powers , to  think you could  help me heal!
I discard you like a forgotten tommorow , on me you have no claim ,
Basking in glory , I bathe in the sun , I m free of you , oh cruel rain!
Touch me once again and I will die for all times, oh sinister rain,
'Cause  that's what water is to a dying  dancing flame!sf




 

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Wendy Flora
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since 2000-01-11
Posts 182
Virginia
1 posted 2000-02-02 10:35 AM


I like the rhythm of this... I can feel the musical quality.  Wonderful! -wen
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