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The Jackal Member
since 1999-08-13
Posts 426Springfield, Massachusetts U.S.A |
she says i have a heart of gold but it only helps to weigh me down she rivets and halts the world at will just to prove thats shes still around and she needs to end my imperfections just to prove that she can doesnt she sound more like a man.. she wonders why i bother to care she will stop the wind in its very wake just to relish the sound of everyone's meager heart break.. |
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faith Member
since 2000-01-31
Posts 89 |
That was very nice!  morbid faith |
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Ted Reynolds Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 331 |
I like this, and bet you can stretch it out a lot longer with no loss of vitality. (I did stumble over the word "meager" every time, though . . . both for meaning and rhythm.) |
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roxane Senior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 505us |
i am so glad to see you posted in CA. this is really great as usual. i love the end, it's wonderful imagery. |
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