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The Disconnect
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The Disconnect |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL 
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In silence fingers fall with mind bent inward. Focus. She hears his voice there saying the exact things she needs. Oh it's there. the perfect sound of it whispering broken things taking her will. She gives it and floats along the waves. ink black mind not even knowing that her growling mouth is open wider. Very unpretty but honest in it's placement. She stays frozen by raw chants from his lips wandering in sensation, soul numb, safe place, can't see the blood of atonement from here just the raspy dark and how lovely things are with emotion on the shore. "I know this love will tear me to pieces |
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Gunslinger Senior Member
since 1999-10-09
Posts 901TX, USA |
Wow! Hard to grasp the intricacies of this with one reading. A sense of dark, and yet a fulfillment. May be too deep for this cowboy, but enjoyable nonetheless. |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
probably way out there . . . BUT! Sounds sort of like being in bed where the night things happen and all the negatives are being torn out being replaced by longed for positives . . . and in the end - in the end, hope that finally . . . a prayer that - Yes. j [This message has been edited by jwesley (01-26-2021 04:32 PM).] |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Gunslinger, You are correct about the dark and fulfillment. I think you've grasped it well. Thank you for reading.  "I know this love will tear me to pieces |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
J, Not way out there at all. It's definitely about those things and definitely about that prayer. *sighs* Thank you. "I know this love will tear me to pieces |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
I love this. Disconnecting from the world. . . Very well done. . . -- That which gives light must endure burning. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Certainly, a poem with up and down emotions well depicted. I like the kind of honesty that's depicted, kind of interesting for sure. Thought provoking right! true love never looks after it's own interests |
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Forlorn Angel Member Posts 143 |
Very mysterious when this happens. The way the mind wanders into our own little worlds. Loved it! |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
There are no safe places, Jenn. A few of us even seem to find it more comforting as the danger level rises... all sense of logic be damned. Makes for a fun, if sometimes soul-sucking ride though. |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Lady T,,, Enjoyed very much, Definitely one of your more intriguing writes. I will leave it at that at the risk of having egg on my face...Paul ~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~ |
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Forlorn Angel Member Posts 143 |
very thought provoking. |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Sven, Thank you. The disconnect is amazing with the right person in mind. "I know this love will tear me to pieces I know his hands will dig up my secrets" Meg Myers |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
ethome, Thank you. I'm glad the ups and downs came through well. I try for raw and honest in everything that I write. "I know this love will tear me to pieces |
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Temptress
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Forlorn Angel, Thank you. There is definitely mystery in the way we can totally block out everything else. It has its advantages and disadvantages. "I know this love will tear me to pieces |
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Temptress
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Michael, Thank you. You may be right about the safe places. Even disconnecting from the world takes a certain amount of connection with a darkness. The appeal of danger depends on the day. "I know this love will tear me to pieces |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Paul, Thank you. I wish you wouldn't have "left it at that" though.  I've been curious about the rest of it since I read your comment back when I first posted this. "I know this love will tear me to pieces |
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