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Michael

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Member Rara Avis

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California

0 posted 2021-03-03 04:40 PM

Night Falls

Night falls on the haunted land,
An eerie essence close at hand.
A whisper there’s something else there,
A stirring in the chill, dank air.

Some sleight of hand, some twist of fate
That tells you you’re content to wait.
The feeling leaves you ill-at-ease.
The mistrust takes you by degrees.

And so you spurn the sage advice,
For no, you never could play nice.
You take that step, for ruin awaits,
And there’s no appeasing the Fates.

Your eyes, beholden to the shrine
Of something distant and divine,
Of choices made, hard to keep track,
When mirrors refuse to look back.

Blown here and there, ash in the wind,
Time lost a handsome dividend.
Who can afford to pay such price,
With their own life the sacrifice?

Till in shrill blackness you awaken
To all in life that you’ve forsaken.
The hour of death close at hand.
Night falls on the haunted land.

Michael Anderson

03/03/21

Lost Dreamer
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since 1999-06-20

Posts 2464
Somewhere near the Rainbow

1 posted 2021-03-04 05:19 PM

Very Eerie, gave me chills. Job well done

Paul Wilson

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since 2002-07-07

Posts 4711
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2 posted 2021-03-04 05:54 PM

Michael...I must say you have allowed that door to your inner self to open a little bit
revealing what I am used to reading from you.
Enjoyed very much especially the last stanza
Take care my friend...Paul

~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~
Paul

Michael

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Posts 7666
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3 posted 2021-03-06 07:08 AM

Oh, good to see you here, Lost Dreamer. How are you doing these days?

Michael

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4 posted 2021-03-06 07:11 AM

hey Paul, wasn't really comfortable with this poem. "Night falls" is so cliché. It's more like Night envelopes us...or maybe that light abandons us altogether. But alas, you see where my mind has been these days. The meaning I used to could pack into a single stanza now takes, and I know the long-winded disgust in that.

Anyhow, you owe me a couple of challenge lines, my friend.

Forlorn Angel
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5 posted 2021-03-15 10:54 PM

reminds me of a line in a poem I wrote a while back

"reflections of who staring back at you ...no doubt we have Angels in our pockets..."

Forlorn Angel
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6 posted 2021-03-15 11:25 PM

And so you spurn the sage advice,
For no, you never could play nice.
You take that step, for ruin awaits,
And there’s no appeasing the Fates.

Loved this!!!

Temptress

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-06-15

Posts 7136
Mobile, AL

7 posted 2021-05-14 08:00 PM

For some reason this makes the words, "straight into the arms of destruction" come to mind. I think this tapped my soul on it's shoulder. Yes,I'm searching your poems and catching up. ;-)

"I know this love will tear me to pieces
I know his hands will dig up my secrets"

Meg Myers

Poet In Pink
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Posts 1066
MI

8 posted 2021-05-27 11:55 PM

Hello Michael ~ Hope you are well
It's amazing how many thoughts & feelings come to light in the darkness....
Much enjoyed my read as I always do
Alana

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