You’d know Her Even If You Didn’t: A Penny Saved Is Passage Paid...

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Open Poetry #50

You’d know Her Even If You Didn’t: A Penny Saved Is Passage Paid...

Bluesy Socrateaser
Member Elite

since 2002-11-07

Posts 2417
In The Mirror

0 posted 2017-12-31 05:06 AM

She has a familiar walk
...you've never seen
She knows all things
...you can't know
She repeats things
...you heard but once
She wears things
...you wore out
She aches for love
...you smile for a dime
She clings to her teddy
...you shot the bear
She doesn't rise early
...you're always late
She reads Edgar’s Raven
...you find birds a bore
She plots your demise
...while you sleep it off
She shades the bird's cage
...placing pennies on your eyes

...just bein' Bluesy

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

1 posted 2017-12-31 06:11 AM

You run much deeper than I do, I'm just an old song writer that loves to write lyrics.

However, the beautiful ambiguity of this piece creates images that could outfit the reader's imagination with the comfort of recognition.

Very much enjoyed!

true love never looks after it's own interests

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

2 posted 2017-12-31 10:52 AM

Bluesy this poem is downright creepy! I don't think of creepy when I think of your writing. So, for me, this is kinda new and different. Of course you did it very well. The pennies on the eyes gives me the willies.
~L

Bluesy Socrateaser
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since 2002-11-07

Posts 2417
In The Mirror

3 posted 2017-12-31 06:05 PM

Thanks for reading and commenting as you did, Eric.

Much obliged!

...just bein' Bluesy

Bluesy Socrateaser
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since 2002-11-07

Posts 2417
In The Mirror

4 posted 2017-12-31 06:09 PM

Not to worry, Miss Lori. I'll not make it a habit. I like for you to see all sides, and you're keen to notice things as they are.

Thank you so much!

...just bein' Bluesy

Poet In Pink
Senior Member
Posts 1066
MI

5 posted 2018-01-04 02:19 PM

I think I'd rather have the lil' pink elephants with purple spots! Welcome to the darkside...We have cookies! ha ha Enjoyed Bluesy

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