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s1nfully_1nn0c3nt
Senior Member

since 2003-10-26

Posts 1105
Watertown, NY

0 posted 2017-10-12 01:42 PM

And he cried
Spilling out his tears
Spilling out his fears
It’ll be a long and trying time
“Haven’t you been overseas before”
His reply would break her heart
“I’ve never been afraid
but now
I have something to lose”

And she cried
knowing what love is.

-Trina
...because the most powerful words in your life are "I might be wrong"...

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

1 posted 2017-10-12 03:51 PM

You are still in fine form, Trina.

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

s1nfully_1nn0c3nt
Senior Member

since 2003-10-26

Posts 1105
Watertown, NY

2 posted 2017-10-12 09:46 PM

Thanks Jerry! I wasn’t sure if it needed more or if it was good just the way it is- I’m still not sure lol
I’ve always struggled with “happy writing” but I felt like I needed to write this- almost like it had to be written.

-Trina
...because the most powerful words in your life are "I might be wrong"...

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

3 posted 2017-10-13 11:46 AM

You haven't lost your touch. I think you ended it just fine with a whole lot of emotion just dangling there like a piñata.
To have spelled it all out would have lessened the impact. Ya done good kiddo! ~L

jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

4 posted 2017-10-13 12:49 PM

I think it's PERFECT, as written!

j.

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

5 posted 2017-10-13 08:22 PM

Knowing love is the most beautiful feeling..even under less than perfect circumstances.

Wonderful poem...

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

6 posted 2017-10-14 04:37 PM

such beauty and emotion.....

Poet In Pink
Senior Member
Posts 1066
MI

7 posted 2017-10-18 10:24 PM

Trina this tugs at the heart-strings ~ Tenderly expressed emotions ~ Much enjoyed ~ Alana

s1nfully_1nn0c3nt
Senior Member

since 2003-10-26

Posts 1105
Watertown, NY

8 posted 2017-10-19 01:45 PM

Thanx for looking in everyone and for your kind words- they mean a lot ❤️

-Trina
...because the most powerful words in your life are "I might be wrong"...

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