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2islander2
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since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

0 posted 2017-02-03 04:22 PM

From the immense spruce,
Millions of leaves soared,
Joining in spirals so black.

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

1 posted 2017-02-03 04:44 PM

Ahhh . . . Caught your poem almist as you posted. Yeah! The image you presented was actually very intense as, in my thoughts, I saw the starlings and the leaves become as one. "Very" graphic indeed.

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

Bluesy Socrateaser
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since 2002-11-07

Posts 2417
In The Mirror

2 posted 2017-02-03 07:36 PM

Blackbirds come by now and again in numbers impossible to count. They do rest in the trees as leaves and they all leave within milliseconds of each other. I often wonder which of them was the first to lift it's legs to take flight.

Good poetry yann.

...just bein' Bluesy

jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

3 posted 2017-02-04 02:56 PM

very nicely and well done my friend! Loved the perfect metaphors!

j.

2islander2
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since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

4 posted 2017-02-04 04:16 PM

thanks jerry, i tried to be very close of the scene , the lucky scene at twenty meters from my house and two consecutive days, really impressive when thousands birds fly away,

have a good day

yann

2islander2
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since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

5 posted 2017-02-04 04:20 PM

thanks bluesy for the precise observation this is some magical scene to watch, and sure there is some physics there, and mathematical curvings
have a good day

yann

2islander2
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since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

6 posted 2017-02-04 04:22 PM

thanks jwesley, i love when real physics and metaphor coexist witrh beauty, a good stuff for litterature
have a good day

yann

tann

Marchmadness
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since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

7 posted 2017-03-14 07:37 AM

Very nice.

2islander2
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since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

8 posted 2017-03-16 06:55 PM

thanks Ida,

P.U Stinkenbaum
Member
Posts 388
No Fan Of Exhaust Fans

9 posted 2017-03-18 10:31 PM

The wonders (and yes, physics) of nature are thrilling. Those that ignore them are usually out chasing rats, a sad and despondent undertaking. I'm with you 100% yann!

Pass the Glade if you're going to do that here...please!

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