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Bluesy Socrateaser
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since 2002-11-07
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In The Mirror

0 posted 2017-09-24 11:02 PM


Sitting in an old tire
swinging on a rope
while leaf fairies twitter
from a tired old oak

He plays his dads guitar
and gives her a sparkling glance
He says he's gonna be a star
and asks her to the dance

They were teens just a-runnin' wild
in love since they were five
He called her his little "honey-child"
and made her feel alive

Then they split-up for nigh a year
thought they'd run around
The time had made them both pay dear
'cause they were trouble bound

Now the two came back together
as the storm clouds did subside
And now the sunny weather
finds them walkin' side-by-side

...just bein' Bluesy

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DaysofView
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since 2014-04-01
Posts 433
Just A Slice Of The Pie
1 posted 2017-09-26 11:08 PM


So much to like about this poem!
Like this!

Sitting in an old tire
swinging on a rope
while leaf fairies twitter
from a tired old oak

Terrific Bluesy!

I want to die in my sleep like my grandfather...not like the passengers screaming in the back of his car.

Bluesy Socrateaser
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since 2002-11-07
Posts 2417
In The Mirror
2 posted 2017-09-28 01:12 AM


Hey Stacy! Thanks a lot for your sweet comment!
Don't be a stranger and say hey to Billy-boy!

...just bein' Bluesy

BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549
By the Seaside
3 posted 2017-09-28 05:42 PM


Been there...i love how matter of fact your poem is.  Thanks for this up close and in your face poem.  Good stuff.

[This message has been edited by BluesSerenade (09-28-2017 07:49 PM).]

Lori Grosser Rhoden
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Fair to middlin' of nowhere
4 posted 2017-09-28 08:31 PM


I don't know what to say about this poem. I like it very much. Back in tha day when love is young and fresh and uncomplicated, makes me think of Ivory soap... ~L
Krawdad
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5 posted 2017-09-28 11:57 PM


Cool

Reprise the third stanza at the end and you have song lyrics, a la the late 50's.  No?

Enjoyed this!

Bluesy Socrateaser
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In The Mirror
6 posted 2017-09-29 01:54 AM


Many thanks for your keenly descriptive comments, Blues.
Much appreciated!

...just bein' Bluesy

Bluesy Socrateaser
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In The Mirror
7 posted 2017-09-29 01:58 AM


Thanks to you, Lori Rhoden...and when you write "Ivory Soap", I think of Marilyn Chambers!   Oh yeah!

...just bein' Bluesy

Bluesy Socrateaser
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In The Mirror
8 posted 2017-09-29 02:04 AM


Great idea E.J! Fire up the 'ol '53 Flathead and let 'er rip!

Sitting in an old tire
swinging on a rope
while leaf fairies twitter
from a tired old oak

He plays his dads guitar
and gives her a sparkling glance
He says he's gonna be a star
and asks her to the dance

They were teens just a-runnin' wild
in love since they were five
He called her his little "honey-child"
and made her feel alive

Then they split-up for nigh a year
thought they'd run around
The time had made them both pay dear
'cause they were trouble bound

Now the two came back together
as the storm clouds did subside
And now the sunny weather
finds them walkin' side-by-side

Yes, they were teens just a-runnin' wild
in love since they were five
He called her his little "honey-child"
and made her feel alive

Ha-ha! Thanks again!

...just bein' Bluesy

Poet In Pink
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MI
9 posted 2017-10-02 04:46 PM


A delightful story poem Bluesy ~ Gotta love happy endings   Much enjoyed ~ Alana
Bluesy Socrateaser
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since 2002-11-07
Posts 2417
In The Mirror
10 posted 2017-10-03 02:09 AM


Yes, Miss Pinky..."happy endings" should always be the rule and not the exception.

Many thanks!

...just bein' Bluesy

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