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Bluesy Socrateaser
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In The Mirror

0 posted 2017-09-22 03:47 AM


Loving in the dark
Puddling moonlight for their bed
Shadows soft and warm

Sounds of their breathing
Harmonize with their bodies
Leave them as vapor

Where two had arrived
Only one leaves attended
One waits for the sun

Sun exposes faults
Which hide within moon puddles
Giving them a name

Moons can be lonely
Depending where you come from
Find your own puddle

...and glow some within it


...just bein' Bluesy

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Lori Grosser Rhoden
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since 2009-10-10
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Fair to middlin' of nowhere
1 posted 2017-09-22 09:51 AM


Bluesy
This poem turned out to be a little tricky for me...

Where two had arrived
Only one leaves attended
One waits for the sun

If two arrive and one waits for the sun and the other one leaves who is attending?

I really like the moon puddles and all that and glow some with in it but the rest is giving me fits. It is Friday and I'm not hitting on all cylinders anyway. So I'm sure it is all very simple. PLZ set me straight. ~L

Bluesy Socrateaser
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since 2002-11-07
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In The Mirror
2 posted 2017-09-23 04:50 AM


Perhaps not a "who", Lori Rhoden... Don't let it lead you to a corner. I like the way you think...and think more. Conclusions can be hard around the edges, and not always fun.

...just bein' Bluesy

nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29
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Between the Lines
3 posted 2017-09-24 06:04 PM


I've  lived your words in the past...love how you described the moon...puddles and all.
Bluesy Socrateaser
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In The Mirror
4 posted 2017-09-24 10:36 PM


Thanks Maureen, for reading and relating. I appreciate your comments.

...just bein' Bluesy

Poet In Pink
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5 posted 2017-10-02 05:17 PM


Love the title and the way your words have my thoughts puddling up     I enjoy poems that get my thinker thunkin'  ~ Thanks Bluesy ~ Alana
2islander2
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by the sea
6 posted 2017-10-02 06:53 PM


so delicate images, seek everyone his puddle to mirror something, loved my reading


yann

Bluesy Socrateaser
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7 posted 2017-10-03 02:01 AM


Miss Pinky...

Your ways with your words are wonderful! Thank you so much for your kind reply.
Keep that "thinker thunkin'"!

...just bein' Bluesy

Bluesy Socrateaser
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In The Mirror
8 posted 2017-10-03 02:03 AM


Thank you yann, for your reading and your comment. Much obliged!

...just bein' Bluesy

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