Open Poetry #50 |
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Measured Moment |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside ![]() |
There are whispers in the woods where temptation haunts and lovers dwell. Stirring my private heart moving deep inside the rustling holding the moment still. Magnifying the silence a hush quivers quietly skimming the shallow waters. A seeking beyond the proximity of daydreams relishing in vivid recall, takes me back to the beginning when I first held your eyes. My backbone fixed and knitted, hard pressed between summer leaves and moss covered stones. A measured moment in time tucked inside a hollow oak. But it was the secret cove after the rain fell where I was most content. Relishing the fluid flutter slipping between clouds of cashmere folded up in the beat of your heart. Like a silver lining that keeps me covered when my breath becomes a murmur dancing on the wind that stirs my memories leaves me without words to define you. You were simply the beginning and end of my poetry. Swaying in the gentle pull under the blissful blue ethereal of midnight. Our stars crossed until the river ran and pulled me under, stepping freely off the edge. Drowning beneath each sensational ripple rushing in the warmth of your rapids, that I knew by no other heart, sending me, time after time. *reworked/past tense ![]() [This message has been edited by BluesSerenade (09-06-2017 11:35 PM).] |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Damn Bluses, you pulled out all the stops and gave your readers a grand slam of rich words and inner feelings. There are so many wonderful one liners, to list them all I would have to post your whole poem. Magnificent! ~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~ |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Well heck JP I sure appreciate your nice reply. It means so much. Thanks deary, |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
This is really a gem. So many wonderful lines that are rich with emotion and imagery. Jerry wasn't overstating at all. ~L |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Thanks for all your support and encouraging words. You're sweet Lori. Hope all is well and good on the home front. |
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Poet In Pink Senior Member Posts 1066 MI |
A most tender and heart-touching read ~ So beautiful are your expressions of loves sacred moments ~ Loved this from start to finish Blues ![]() |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Thanks for you nice reply pinky gal. |
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soul drifter Senior Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 711Colorado |
Truly exceptional writing my friend. I don't know how you do it. Really loving the colors you used here. Damn beautiful. "Beauty has a way of seeming unconcerned" - Neil Finn, 'Terrorize Me' |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Far beyond the drumming of the heart and the heat of the skin flushed to the point just shy of flames, this piece is your soul speaking, my friend, yearning for things past, as well as pulling today into perspective. We all send vibes though the ether, sooner or later, and I dare say, your heart, your soul, the personification of you, was in this piece, reworked or not, today. Sometime a piece we offer, be it old, be it new, appears at the perfect time in our lives, and everything that makes us, us, screams, THIS IS ME! , as IMHO, you've done here. Lovely write from your ultimate depths, my friend and I enjoyed immensely! My Heart - Yours . . . jimmy |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Hi, all I can say is this was stunning! I so much enjoyed this read... great way for me to start my day! Much thanks for sharing ![]() |
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augustsky Senior Member Posts 828 midwest US |
Blues,Truly love the way you wove this beauty, metaphor-Marvelous this was. ![]() Enjoyed.. Sky~ ~Don't Quit Your Day Dream~ |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
As exquisite as your poem is, Blues, and I love and relate to every word, what I relate to most is every bit of: *reworked/past tense ![]() |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
"You were simply the beginning and end of my poetry." That says it all. Beautiful imagery...can feel the yearn. Glad to see this one make its way back up. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Soul drifter...sorry I’m so late telling you how happy I am that you stopped by. Made my day. ![]() JW, thank you for your introspective reply to my work. Yep this is who I am and I’m good with that. I mean if we aren’t true to ourselves then we are pretty much out of options. Thank you kind sir. Oh Coco how very good it is to see you here. Thank you for taking the time to look me up. My muse went on a long long vacation and I don’t think she’s coming back. So happy to see you, thanks again. Hi Sky, thanks for your gracious reply to my poem. Always good to see and read you at Pip. Lady Owl, you crack me up, only you dear lady. Thanks for being here. Michael, it means a lot to have you read and leave a reply to my poem. I think we are similar when it comes to poetry, we both write deep emotion. I am happy we are both here, sort of. 😎 |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
This is a gem Bluesy Girl. Loved it from beginning to end. Good to read you once again. Time has cast a spell on you~ |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Dear enchanting poetess, does wonders to have you here. Thank you for your sweet reply. Hope you are well dear one. |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
I am always happy to read your poetry, Blues and this is certainly no exception. I am just so glad that some of the regulars are returning. I have missed you all so much. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Like you, I’m always happy to read and see a familiar name. Change is a constant, and so it goes.... but those were the days and I miss them. Thanks Ida. |
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