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Your Eyes
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soul drifter Senior Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 711Colorado |
Your Eyes As a bee sting rain conquers the evening side I watch the stars fall in your eyes washing every pent up emotion away so this is how I know I'm going to stay walking six inches off the street to a place where all the young lovers meet just one last puzzle piece then I'll see my dreams complete Shaped by the soft pounding rain in your touch I'm a man anew set sailing again it's too much but I can never get enough just a glance of your eyes and you've called my bluff Your eyes kingdoms rise and fall but in your eyes a fire that never dies it never fades at all As a birdcall sun ignites the morningside I watch the clouds part in your eyes the light pours majestic like the finest wine so this is how I'm going to fall from the vine smiling a hundred miles long incessantly humming my favorite song love memorized by heart and I'll see my dreams as art Shaped by the soft pounding rain in your touch I'm a man anew set sailing again it's too much but I can never get enough just a glance of your eyes and you've called my bluff Your eyes angels run and play deep in your eyes a fire that never dies never will it fade away And this is how I know I'm going to stay walking six inches off the street to a place where all the young lovers meet just one last puzzle piece then I'll see my dreams complete "Whatever makes you weird is probably your greatest asset"-Joss Whedon |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
As a birdcall sun ignites the morningside I watch the clouds part in your eyes the light pours majestic like the finest wine so this is how I'm going to fall from the vine smiling a hundred miles long incessantly humming my favorite song love memorized by heart and I'll see my dreams as art --------------------------- What can I say that I haven't already said. You write so fine!!!! |
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soul drifter Senior Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 711Colorado |
I really appreciate you saying it anyway. Thank you so much Blues. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Just cause I'm missing your poetry. |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
I loved this! It was such a celebration of discovery and love. only one small critique- "Shaped by the soft pounding rain" Soft and pounding contradict each other. ~L |
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