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novemberblue
Junior Member
Posts 11
Dirty South

0 posted 2017-06-07 05:09 PM

one catastrophic line
wound around my throat
the razor wire brambles ran
like ivy on dead porches

strangling the boards and bones
creeping shards of sundering cold
frayed every quaking nerve
from the sanctity of skin

you left me here in ribbons

left me here

and this profane bouquet
withering on the floor

all of the thorns purged
that I would rather bleed to death against
than a thousand maudlin words
perfumed with gasoline

concussed and warring I shook
for necessary surgery
the lungs locked and pushed aside
if you had reached in

with violent nails and wrenched
the ribs from beneath my breast
and lighted candles in the walls
to glance this gasping heart

I think I could have then with you
wearing me on your hands
but you were only so
very sorry
~H

"Can you see the real me?" Pete Townshend

Poet In Pink
Senior Member
Posts 1066
MI

1 posted 2017-06-07 06:25 PM

Hello Heather pleased to meet you The imagery stark darkness ~ The raw pain so evident ~ You pen it well ~ Look forward to reading more from you ~ Alana

novemberblue
Junior Member
Posts 11
Dirty South

2 posted 2017-06-07 06:32 PM

Thank you so much, Alana! Looking forward to future glances

Heather

"Can you see the real me?" Pete Townshend

jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

3 posted 2017-06-07 09:39 PM

I like the overall feel of this, my friend, but after several reads I will just leave it at that because I can't put my finger on why.

Did enjoy the reads, though...

j.

novemberblue
Junior Member
Posts 11
Dirty South

4 posted 2017-06-07 10:17 PM

Well, I do appreciate your time

. I'm trying to get familiar with the blue pages here again. It's changed a bit with so many gone. Nice to meet you new once more.

Heather

"Can you see the real me?" Pete Townshend

jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

5 posted 2017-06-07 10:34 PM

Oops! Seems I left off in mid-sentence in my previous comment... so here it is completed:

I like the overall feel of this, my friend, but after several reads I will just leave it at that because I can't put my finger on why I can't quite get deeper into it than that.

again, enjoyed

j.

By the way I've been around since about 2000 and seem to remember a name of "Heather" but not novemberblue --- did you use a different handle??

novemberblue
Junior Member
Posts 11
Dirty South

6 posted 2017-06-07 11:37 PM

I'm glad you enjoyed it some! I'm floating around in the archives somewhere as unboundpoetess, lol. I joined in 08 and haven't posted in a looong time. For some reason, I wasn't able to reclaim my old username...? So anyway, here I am, reinvented. Lots of dear friends missing here.
H

"Can you see the real me?" Pete Townshend

Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

7 posted 2017-06-08 09:33 AM

This is really good. I am coming back to read it agsin in a bit. I like it.

Alison

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

8 posted 2017-06-08 10:44 AM

Welcome to Passions! This was a great first entry, and we look forward to more. Please check your email for a very special greeting!

novemberblue
Junior Member
Posts 11
Dirty South

9 posted 2017-06-08 06:45 PM

Thank you Alison for the hope of a second glance!

I appreciate the welcome, Sunshine

"Can you see the real me?" Pete Townshend

2islander2
Member Ascendant

since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

10 posted 2017-06-08 10:09 PM

thanks heather for the darkness here that you manage with poetry, this sounds deep and is beautifully expressed, will read it again

yann

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