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Open Poetry #50

Another time

DarkofNight
Junior Member
Posts 13

0 posted 2021-01-02 05:38 PM

Another time ago,
Another rhyme ago,
I saw your beauty flowing from inside.
When we smiled more,
When we touched more,
Before we pulled away to hide.
I wish for laughter,
Not the tears of after,
But wishing is for naught,
I believe I am forgot.

G.

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

1 posted 2021-01-02 07:46 PM

G,
Nice work! Welcome to what I like to call the blue buffet. I like the way you built up to the last line in your poem. ~L

2islander2
Member Ascendant

since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

2 posted 2021-01-04 08:40 PM

nice thougts, last one can be precious
yann

Namyh
Senior Member

since 2009-01-20

Posts 988

3 posted 2021-01-24 08:58 AM

Dark Knight - I liked this a lot. Namyh

Temptress

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-06-15

Posts 7136
Mobile, AL

4 posted 2021-03-02 12:48 PM

The drift away can definitely make a person feel forgotten. I love she simplicity of this.

"I know this love will tear me to pieces
I know his hands will dig up my secrets"

Meg Myers

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