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May Day..
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May Day.. |
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augustsky Senior Member Posts 828 midwest US 
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May Day~ May Day..May Day.. Nuance of her adrift at sea, Something is amiss, not free Feelings not the same inside, But he's no longer strong, So loyalty abides. Years like waves roll over her, Thoughts call out May Day..May Day.. But knows a rescue she'll not accept, For a promise must be kept, Even though the heart beats out Emergency, A facade she lives, while her essence is lost at sea Oh, May Day..May Day.. Just a bell-buoy in the distance rocking.. Echo slowly knocking, As it Fades.. ©Augustsky Inspired by the song:'May Day' By: Home-Free, Currently one of my favorite songs & a cappella groups https://youtu.be/znoV5gND9g0 [This message has been edited by augustsky (08-06-2020 01:41 AM).] |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
may day is a beautiful poem, launched at the sea, with some rememberings of "war", appreciate this metaphor yann |
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Starmcneil 1955 Member Posts 174 Alberta, Canada |
I love the flow of this poem...am amazed by the sadness I feel from it...wonderfully written. |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Hrmmm... I suddenly feel like I am on the Titanic watching the last last lifeboat row away. This is a sad place to be, Sky~, trapped more by your own code of honor than anything else that *should be present to bind you here... "But knows a rescue she'll not accept" funny how we can ascribe the thought of being bound to a state of feared permanent drifting. The thoughts at least give you a voice...and you share beautifully on a vast sea that echoes with many others who are lost in eerily similar circumstance. Michael |
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augustsky Senior Member Posts 828 midwest US |
Many thanks to all for your reads & comments. guess this one sort of fell flat.. but the acappella group is great! Sky~ [This message has been edited by augustsky (08-08-2020 11:15 PM).] |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
Sky, You are to hard on yourself. It is your work so you are free to call it flat if you want. It took me places I didn't realize I'd been to until you verbalized it for me. Flat? Stood up and slapped me in the face. ~L |
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augustsky Senior Member Posts 828 midwest US |
((Lori))..you don't even know.. You so do my heart good,  Thanks.Sky~ Sometimes..Miracles are just good people |
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