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Down Lost Dog Lane
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Down Lost Dog Lane |
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augustsky Senior Member Posts 828 midwest US 
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Down Lost Dog Lane~ Into the woods down lost-dog-lane the ideal place to walk and reflect, I let the fog take my hand and lose myself to long ago. I could feel him probing.. my imagination, and I let him pet my wonder, With a smile he licked the fingertips of my naivete, then sopped the loving of this woman's wiles, gravy..to his bread, innocence his dessert, and I let him. Dark eyes hypnotize, things always become murky, but we are still Better for the Knowing, even for the fleeting kiss, and the warm contagion of words, taken blind to the land of Nod, just to the left of his trove of dreams, thoughts to reincarnate whenever he wants, a twilight taste of sweet recall, to stir the pot of passion that bubbles with could-have-been. I walk alone through these haunted Woods while a poem meanders up ahead, leaves are but scatterings of vague obscenities, an old lovers whisper, a message tangled in the mist.. stoned into the past down lost-dog-lane. ©Augustsky |
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soul drifter Senior Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 711Colorado |
“I walk alone through these haunted Woods while a poem meanders up ahead, leaves are but scatterings of vague obscenities, an old lovers whisper, a message tangled in the mist..” Phenomenal. A poem (or a song) always meanders up ahead of us, conscious of it or no. Ever will they come to those of us who are plugged in enough to receive. I don’t really know what I’m saying. All I know is I absolutely love this and your work in general, to make a long story less long. Please never let that pen go. |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
this is the best, to walk and reflect, a rich poem, a sweet lane for sure yann |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Sky...Loved the first stanza Into the woods down lost-dog-lane the ideal place to walk and reflect, I let the fog take my hand and lose myself to long ago. What wonderful imagination in those words. The rest makes these old bones stir and think of when??? Great poem really loved it.Thanks for sharing...Paul ~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~ |
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augustsky Senior Member Posts 828 midwest US |
Souls, you do this poet-woman good, Thank you for your wonderful response. You keep on writing also  Sky~ Sometimes..Miracles are just good people |
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augustsky Senior Member Posts 828 midwest US |
"a sweet lane"..really liked that Yann. Thank you for the read Poet. Sky~ Sometimes..Miracles are just good people |
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augustsky Senior Member Posts 828 midwest US |
Pleased you liked Poet Paul, as for "these old bones"..that made me smile..mine aren't exactly young. Always enjoy your thoughts.Sky~ Sometimes..Miracles are just good people |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Ah, it can be so tempting to try and peek down the doors of our pasts we never *fully opened...to just step back and place ourselves on that threshold of chance. This is written so beautifully I almost fear to apply my meager interpretation to it. "and I let him pet my wonder," loved that. Michael |
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augustsky Senior Member Posts 828 midwest US |
Michael, What a Dear response, you smile my heart, Thank you. Sky~ Sometimes..Miracles are just good people |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Live those last few lines in the 3rd stanza. Excellent writing. |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
I've walked there, somewhere out of sight, behind you, because I could smell perfume in the air . . . tried but couldn't catch up - another trick of 'Lost Dog Lane' - where 'time' is just a shimmer separating all. really enjoyed . . . j. |
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augustsky Senior Member Posts 828 midwest US |
Ida, Your thoughts mean much..Thank you for the read & reply. Sky~ Sometimes..Miracles are just good people |
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augustsky Senior Member Posts 828 midwest US |
J.,Your response was a Poem within itself, which I Totally enjoyed, Thank you. Sky~ Sometimes..Miracles are just good people |
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Starmcneil 1955 Member Posts 174 Alberta, Canada |
oh my gosh...you wove magic with your words taking me on the walk with you as I relived memories...brilliant...thank you for the walk |
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augustsky Senior Member Posts 828 midwest US |
Star-Karen, Well..Thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed the walk. Sky~ Sometimes..Miracles are just good people |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
I've been to similar places, but could never describe it so beautifully. You bring magic to such memories. You have a beautiful gift. "How much is real? So much to question |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
Sky, Gosh girl, I might as well just ditto what everybody else said. But I have to say, I can't get over the impact yout words have on me. I marvel at the flora and fauna of your incredible phrases as I follow your words eagerly wherever they take me.This particular piece made me literally crave chocolate at the end. Damn you're good! ~L |
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augustsky Senior Member Posts 828 midwest US |
Temptress, I Thank you for the very Lovely comment, I enjoy your gift also. Sky~ Sometimes..Miracles are just good people |
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augustsky Senior Member Posts 828 midwest US |
"chocolate" Ok..LOL I'll have a piece with you. Your replies are Delicious Lori,Thank you Sky~ Sometimes..Miracles are just good people |
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