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The Haunt
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The Haunt |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California 
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The Haunt He lingers, lone in the shadow, No one can see him there. A spirit felled, a dream dispelled... An echo of despair. Traipses the hall of seen it all, And listens at the door. Yet no voice will come of the chill Felt here forevermore. He places hand up to the knob... It pushes right on through. Transparent eyes close on his sighs, As he refuses to Step forward toward the strange accord Of laughter he can sense, But turns and wails as night avails The truth of consequence. No solace found to this cursed ground, He only wants to grieve. Yet wakes each day as shadow lays A truth he'll never leave. Course set in stone, the walls should groan Of spirit in their wake, Yet new love found yields just one sound Of which he can't partake. The echoes roll, a cleave to soul. The nights now never ending... On Time's torn hand, forever damned, All hope well beyond mending. Benighted eyes, his soul won't rise, The heavens, unforgiving, Just dreams well-fed to taunt the dead Yet haunted by the living. Michael Anderson [This message has been edited by Michael (07-10-2020 09:41 AM).] |
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Marshalzu  
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Beautifully written, so haunting, melancholic and mournful. My only suggestion would be to remove the redundant "the" in the third stanza. |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
lol...thank you for pointing that out, Marshalzu. You'd think spelling and grammar checks would have caught that... Glad you enjoyed. Michael |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Michael...WOW another great story you tell with your words. Loved the unknown factor in this poem, keeps you wanting more and wanting to find out what or who is doing the haunting...Paul ~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~ |
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augustsky Senior Member Posts 828 midwest US |
Now..This just made me Tingle..in the eerie way & also the truly touched way. Excellent Michael Sky~ Sometimes..Miracles are just good people |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Paul, I heard it said once that ghosts don't realize they are dead, or they are still trying to rectify something they couldn't in life...taking a haunted life with them into the next realm, or preventing them access to it as is more likely the case. Glad you like this. Michael |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Glad you enjoyed this, Sky~ Really love your signature btw. |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Your writing has always reminded me of Edgar Allan Poe, Michael. A compliment for sure. |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
That is quite a compliment to me, indeed, Ida. I have always been very fond of Poe, and relate to him well. Michael |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
This one made me shiver. I do see more than just your normal definition of ghost though. Maybe I'm over analyzing? "How much is real? So much to question |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Jenn, lol @ your loaded question. I could get most philosophical with you on that one. Suffice to say that your intuition, or over-analysis, is correct, there's pretty much always more than the surface story to anything I write. Michael |
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