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Temptress
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0 posted 2020-06-07 02:10 AM



you'll probably have to forgive the lack of editing here. I've had a bit to drink.

I fling out insistent hands
to ward off silence
and touch beneath
rough stone behind
raw skin
as wind attempts to keep me calm.
I'm looking at the sky now
laughing from unknown
and humorless places
what is giggling
is giddy with challenge
thrown without restraint
on the ground.
Gauntlet cast
gaze level
eyes filled with the rage
of feeling anything at all.
If only my heart could fast,
but no.
It feasts
on bones and skin
the white remains
the softest pieces
of what is left
when too many storms
have carved out holes
much like dripping rain
does to rocks
over time.
The numb!
The cold!
The raving fiendish monster!
It craves a match,
a round with my will.
Some things are better off
in cages.



"Maybe that's the way I should go
Straight into the mouth of the unknown"

Shinedown

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Goldenrose
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1 posted 2020-06-07 12:31 PM


This reads like a dream / nightmare, in snapshot, great imagery here..

Thanks for sharing.

Michael
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2 posted 2020-06-07 02:30 PM


Jenn,

I gotta admit it, when it comes to a fight, one can never find a more fiendish enemy than themselves.  They won’t fight fair either.  The sky is a vast, humorless place I think.  The many faces I see up there tell me so.

In this poem, I see someone who is bound by natural human emotion and need, and yet her own worst enemy in protecting what shreds of dignified humanity she may still have left.  I wish I could tell you the world is a safe place to allow yourself to feel again.  But I know from experience it is safer to live by thought process than emotion.  If only the emotions would cooperate with said logic we’d all be much better off.

Some deep imagery.  Another enjoyable peek.

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3 posted 2020-06-09 12:04 PM


Goldenrose,

Thank you so much! That is an awesome way to review.


"Maybe that's the way I should go
Straight into the mouth of the unknown"

Shinedown

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4 posted 2020-06-09 12:15 PM


Micheal,

You're right. Also, I'm not sure I fight fairly in general. The sky can be a bit more beautiful when you're not a "lightweight" who is several drinks in with too many things on the mind. Restlessness settling in can be bad.

It isn't safe, but feeling just happens with no regard for my comfort level. It's kind of bossy. On humanity, there have been times where I thought I was losing it.

Thank you for seeing this.


"Maybe that's the way I should go
Straight into the mouth of the unknown"

Shinedown

Michael
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5 posted 2020-06-09 11:05 PM


Humanity's highly overrated anyway.  
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6 posted 2020-06-10 12:00 PM


Micheal,

It definitely is at times. Now I'm thinking about vampires turning their humanity off in shows and movies then going on a rage biting spree.  


"Maybe that's the way I should go
Straight into the mouth of the unknown"

Shinedown

Michael
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7 posted 2020-06-10 07:07 AM


Oh, you mean like politicians?
Temptress
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8 posted 2020-06-10 07:48 AM


Definitely like politicians.


"Maybe that's the way I should go
Straight into the mouth of the unknown"

Shinedown

augustsky
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9 posted 2020-07-18 03:37 PM


Temptress, I liked the entire write..but this
stood out to me"if only my heart could fast"
that is profound & lingering!

Well done..

Sky~

Sometimes..Miracles are just good people
with kind hearts~

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10 posted 2020-07-25 01:10 AM


Just because it's in a cage. . .

Doesn't mean we can't feed it. . .

-- That which gives light must endure burning.
Viktor Frankl

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