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Michael
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0 posted 2020-05-30 06:15 PM



I Would See You


I would see you…boldly proclaim
Words written you worried would shame
You of a past that wrecked your soul.
I would see you restored and whole.

I would see you add a few more,
Though words it seems can be a door.
Once opened, even on a whim,
We’re prone to all that’s behind them.

Of what lies there, we stand unsure
Just what others near will endure.
I would see you speak without weight
Given the words you contemplate.

I would see you not sacrifice
A word, afraid it comes with price.
Nor pace your way through, inch by inch,
But speak your mind, and never flinch.

I would see you hold your head high
Enough to make the heavens sigh!
Passionate, driven, unconstrained,
Not bound to choices preordained.

I would see you regain full will.
Dare to dream first, but then fulfill
Passions drawn from your deepest deep.
Then, my love, I would see you sleep.


Michael Anderson

5/30/2020

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Lori Grosser Rhoden
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1 posted 2020-05-30 11:40 PM


Michael,
I feel like this was written just for me, it touched me deeply. Bless your heart, even if it isn't. ~L

Michael
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2 posted 2020-05-31 07:37 AM


Lori, although you weren't the particular muse for this poem I knew you would relate to it on some levels.  I'm torn between feeling proud that you felt it thorough enough to have been about you and cringing for the anguish your life must have endured to even make that possible.  In truth, I guess there are probably many who could take this to heart.  It's not a subject that gets broached enough, even today.  ((hugs to you))
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3 posted 2020-06-01 09:10 PM


"Wrecked soul" Yes. I feel this sometimes in my worst moments.  

"I would see you regain full will.
Dare to dream first, but then fulfill
Passions drawn from your deepest deep.
Then, my love, I would see you sleep."

This is my favorite part.

Dreaming is easy. Fullfilling is harder, whatever the passions may be. Sleep is the biggest tease of all.


"Maybe that's the way I should go
Straight into the mouth of the unknown"

Shinedown

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4 posted 2020-06-01 09:38 PM


That is exactly how I wanted it interpreted, Temptress... about the sleep.  When one carries so much, a true restful sleep is impossible, a dream in itself even.  If they carry so much with them for so long, I think it begins to rob them from everything they can be, were they free of dilemma.

A purely restful sleep after the bleeding out of all passions.  Yup, a definite tease.

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5 posted 2020-06-01 11:21 PM


I haven't had restful sleep in a long time. Since well before I was of an adult age. Insomnia just follows me around.


"Maybe that's the way I should go
Straight into the mouth of the unknown"

Shinedown

Michael
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6 posted 2020-06-05 12:07 PM


From early teens till in my thirties I had was like that...nightmares shattered every attempt of sleep I had for many years.  Not really sure the why or how but I do sleep and manage good dreams now.  If I knew what changed I'd market it.
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7 posted 2020-07-19 06:30 PM


I think this is one of your best, Michael.

jwesley
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8 posted 2020-07-19 06:50 PM


Hm-mm, I cultivated sleep, especially in my "younger" years (for some reason up to about the time I married my wife) because sleep kept me from seeing all those, for lack of a better term, Ghosts who visited during the night. And I don't mean "dreams" either!

Once I married Terry though, they disappeared.
Thank you wife!

Enjoyed this, my friend.

Jimmy

Michael
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9 posted 2020-07-19 09:57 PM


Thank you, Ida.  This one came from a place inside I don't get to touch very often. Your appreciation means much to me.

Michael

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10 posted 2020-07-19 10:02 PM


That's a beautiful story to me, Jimmy.  I believe I have shared similar experiences as you but never for prolonged periods of times.  That your wife's presences brought peace to your nights I just love.  Took me to about the age of 40 to know what good sleep was, and past 50 before I ever experiences without the help of a prescription.

Michael

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11 posted 2020-07-28 02:54 PM


the past can easily bring the nightmares of experience to life but I love the way you say "I Would See You" that is often what most want...so well written...your words can be felt
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