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Malleable
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL 
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Now the song inside is soft and as my mind is more susceptible to who I really am, I can breathe in the part that loves you without regret. Did time split? As I ask this I realize that I don't even understand my own question. It just seems to make sense. Did meant to be pass us by yet? Is this raw and honest enough? Drunken ramblings turn my tongue and pen. Why can't I speak truth in sober hours. The guardian of my stone drenched house, relieved of it's post, will be back by morning, and one more day will pass without your mouth. I must count them all, obsessively, like penance for some sin I don't remember comittting. I only want to kiss you catching all of your pain between my lips and at the least hold it at bay moment by moment. It could never be enough, but I would spend my days catching every drop of who you are With every part of me. I love you with two parts of myself. times are split past present are joined in resolution and peace if only for now. "Maybe that's the way I should go Straight into the mouth of the unknown" Shinedown |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
...and you were questioning your "oomph!" First I will say, malleable is a word I never thought I would hear you ascribe to yourself in the past. This reflection definitely shows how time and perspective change us I think. (on both our parts). The song inside you needs to come out more often. I love the questions you bring to the fore with your words. Raw enough? Definitely! Not sure how much rawer you could get, and the pure emotion of it pours. Feel like I just got a fresh peek inside your mind, and I have say liked it. Alot! The conjoining of the past and present, and the peace drawn of it gives a solidity that wraps this up beautifully. |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
Michael pretty well covered all the complementary bases. I love the way my eyes roll down your words like a waterfall. ~L |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Michael, Thank you. I said somewhere else today that I had forgotten what "hanging out" with other writers was like. I'm completely female so I'm malleable when it suits me I suppose. Time and perspective doesn't change everyone. Depending on the attitude, I sometimes wish it did. It has definitely changed me in ways. I'm glad you enjoyed the fresh peek. Maybe that means I've grown. It really depends on who you ask. Lori, Now I'm blushing again, and I definitely have a huge goofy smile on my face at your beautiful review. Thank you. "Maybe that's the way I should go Straight into the mouth of the unknown" Shinedown |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
"Now the song inside is soft" I think it was always there. . . it just needed to be brought out. . . Your words always speak from your soul. . . |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Sven, Thanks again for stopping by. Which songs to remember and which ones to forget is usually the problem. It's a good thing that I still have a soul to write with I guess. "Maybe that's the way I should go Straight into the mouth of the unknown" Shinedown |
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