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augustsky
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Posts 828
midwest US

0 posted 2019-11-24 07:41 PM



Strings of Blue~

Long ago..
walking dirt roads
barefoot dusty and content,
climbing trees
reaching for the sound
of violins.

Amid freckled lilies
a tiny poem of Mother's hands
danced and bowed upon the page,
innocent thoughts of who will love me
filled the midway of a violet flowered diary,
a hoot-owl tried to tell me once,
but I fell asleep to his hypnotic tune.

Now my Eyes
climb the trees
to their swaying tips
shedding colored tears,
Mother's hands are far away,
lily stalks no longer star gaze,
but stand headless
like the horseman of October.

Too much given,
sometimes not enough,
and now the sound of violins
make me cry.

Leaves fall and curl at my Shoed feet,
a vagabond wind blows back hair
exposing a face I no longer know,
and the hoot-owls ghost
is silent.

©Augustsky


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Gunslinger
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since 1999-10-09
Posts 901
TX, USA
1 posted 2019-11-25 12:45 PM


Exquisite, Sky... an absolutely beautiful write. Poignant, and very emotion laden. It draws the reader in and makes them empathize.
OwlSA
Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa
2 posted 2019-11-25 05:06 AM


Yes, Sky, I echo Gunslinger's words.
Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666
California
3 posted 2019-11-26 05:44 AM


This reads like a haunting melody, Sky.  There is a distinct difference in haunting and haunted in my mind anyway, mind you... haunting coming from memory and loss.  Can truly feel this here.
augustsky
Senior Member
Posts 828
midwest US
4 posted 2019-11-26 05:24 PM


Thanks GsJohn for that very generous response.

Glad you liked..
Sky~

Autumn..
The Golden Hush
Before Winter~

augustsky
Senior Member
Posts 828
midwest US
5 posted 2019-11-26 05:26 PM


Thank you Owl, pleased you paid me a visit.

Sky~

Autumn..
The Golden Hush
Before Winter~

augustsky
Senior Member
Posts 828
midwest US
6 posted 2019-11-26 05:28 PM


"haunting melody"..I like that M.
& I'm pleased you 'felt'it.

Sky~

Autumn..
The Golden Hush
Before Winter~

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