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Something Wicked This Way Comes
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Something Wicked This Way Comes |
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augustsky Senior Member Posts 828 midwest US 
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Something Wicked this way comes, Out of the gray mist, Unexpectedly, Cocked head With friendly facade, Holds such treachery Behind eyes As pale as the Winter's moon. The helping hand of a stranger Who keeps his talons concealed, The giving heart, Who in truth beats Only for your downfall. A slow trickle of drool Is wiped away quickly As the trusting soul inside Slowly turns the doorknob. What has she let enter there... The night seems to Implode upon itself, Pumpkins shrivel on the vine, There is an uneasy silence.. As if God's creatures Have gone mute. Wise children in the village Chant in their sleep.. "By the pricking of my thumbs, Something Wicked this way comes". Wind rustles wild With leaves, One last Autumn gust... A howling prayer to heaven. ©Augustsky In quotation.. from Shakespears 'Macbeth' |
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Oh this is a juicy tidbit. Morbid even. Can't help but think a shadowy figure with sharp talons might not know how to interact with someone without pain being present. Ever the devil's advocate here. |
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augustsky Senior Member Posts 828 midwest US |
Wicked thing just might enjoy inflicting it (pain), but I like it if a reader takes a different angle.  Thanks Michael I am pieces of all the moments I've had |
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Gunslinger Senior Member
since 1999-10-09
Posts 901TX, USA |
I far prefer your writing to Sir William; but I am afraid I tend to agree with Michael. I have repeatedly met the wicked. I work on Texas Death Row. |
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augustsky Senior Member Posts 828 midwest US |
Thank you GsJohn, I guess the word 'interact' from M's reply stood out for me..because this 'Thing' was written as an evil entity period, nothing human about it. But I understand what M. meant & the interesting response, as I understand your reply Dear Poet. I like the feedback from writers, we are an intriguing bunch. And..Oh Wow..my respect to you for being able to handle that job! Thanks again.. Autumn.. |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
Sky, Wicked little piece this one. The doorknob was an excellent trigger. Nailed it sister! ~L |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
This one made me shiver a bit. Just a short creepy feeling, which is so much more effective than a movie full of gore. Well done. |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Shakespear would be proud. |
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augustsky Senior Member Posts 828 midwest US |
Thank you L. you do a writer Good.  Sky~ Autumn.. |
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augustsky Senior Member Posts 828 midwest US |
I'm pleased that little bit of creepy was enough. Thank you Pilgrimage Sky~ Autumn.. |
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augustsky Senior Member Posts 828 midwest US |
Marchmadness-Ida, You are such a Dear support, Thank you much. Sky~ Autumn.. |
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