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augustsky
Senior Member
Posts 828
midwest US

0 posted 2019-08-31 03:50 AM

My Used To Be Me~

My used to be me
seen it all
through hot Summer endings,
soft shoulder proud,
and unbending.

A mental August letter,
stampless,
meaningless.. to some,
closing left undone.

To the Dearest gift of time
written in heat,
Recall licked
in bitter-sweet,
faded ink followed the cool beckon of Fall,
not knowing the Fleet of it all.

Wishes meant in such Earnest Light,
the yearly passage Rite,
My puff of candle wax Smoke,
My used to be me..

©Augustsky

https://youtu.be/53GIADHxVzM
Sara Bareilles"She Used To Be Mine"

2islander2
Member Ascendant

since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

1 posted 2019-08-31 07:04 AM

this is so beautiful, and delicate images are breathless ???? ouaaaaahhh
yann

Paul Wilson

Member Elite

since 2002-07-07

Posts 4711
United States

2 posted 2019-08-31 12:10 PM

Sky...The tenderness in this really touches my heart. Many thoughts to ponder in this touching poem...Paul

~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~
Paul

soul drifter
Senior Member

since 2004-09-08

Posts 711
Colorado

3 posted 2019-09-01 08:47 AM

Outstanding. I could hear this as a song too.. and it sings. Well done.

Big Sara Bareilles fan too, ‘She Used to Be Mine’ is a big favorite.

augustsky
Senior Member
Posts 828
midwest US

4 posted 2019-09-02 08:34 PM

Thank you Yann, Paul, & Souls..Dear Poets
each of you are.

A Poem Begins as a
Lump in the Throat,
A Sense of Wrong,
A Home-Sickness,
A Love-Sickness.

~Robert Frost

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

5 posted 2019-09-28 08:31 AM

I love the gentle nostalgia in your poetry.

augustsky
Senior Member
Posts 828
midwest US

6 posted 2019-10-07 07:47 PM

Thank you Ida, you do a writer Good.

Sky~

A Poem Begins as a
Lump in the Throat,
A Sense of Wrong,
A Home-Sickness,
A Love-Sickness.

~Robert Frost

Michael

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-13

Posts 7666
California

7 posted 2019-10-09 12:00 PM

I think my "used to be me" knew it all, except for maybe the fact he knew nothing. Yours certainly makes for a better reflection...never have I seen acceptance so eloquently stated.

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

8 posted 2019-10-09 06:54 PM

Sky,
There is a magic to the music of your words. There is always some point in your poem that grabs me and gives me a whirl. I marvel at the way you turn a phrase. You are a delight! ~L

augustsky
Senior Member
Posts 828
midwest US

9 posted 2019-10-12 12:05 PM

Hmm..mmm, I discovered that also, knew hardly
at all what I thought I did.
Your sweet comment made me grin,
Thank you M.

Sky~

augustsky
Senior Member
Posts 828
midwest US

10 posted 2019-10-12 12:07 PM

Lori, You're a Dear heart if there ever was one

..Thanks so much for that.

Sky~

Gunslinger
Senior Member

since 1999-10-09

Posts 901
TX, USA

11 posted 2019-10-12 09:24 AM

Beautiful!

augustsky
Senior Member
Posts 828
midwest US

12 posted 2019-10-14 03:26 PM

Thanks for the read & reply Gs

Sky~

A Poem Begins as a
Lump in the Throat,
A Sense of Wrong,
A Home-Sickness,
A Love-Sickness.

~Robert Frost

J.J.thomas
Member
Posts 84

13 posted 2019-11-17 10:47 PM

Beautiful. Simply beautiful.

augustsky
Senior Member
Posts 828
midwest US

14 posted 2019-11-24 07:19 PM

JJThomas, I Thank you for that Sweet reply.

Sky~

Autumn..
The Golden Hush
Before Winter~

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