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JLHunter
Senior Member

since 2006-10-08

Posts 557
CA United States

0 posted 2017-03-09 08:06 AM

A Last Goodbye
By JLHunter

The time that rages quiet by
Engages one whose soul yearns,
And even seconds quickly fly.

When said man silhouettes the sky,
His tortured shadow writhes and churns
As angels' voices weep and sigh.

Whilst he must watch as daylight burns,
And long lost dreams of love now die,
He spoons them into battered urns.

Then hourglasses taking turns
Recount the raging hours that ply
The highway, as old age it spurns.

And finally his heart knows why...
Eventually his sad soul learns
That each regret his pain now earns
Is smothered with his mournful cry,

...And ended with a last goodbye.

Copyright JLHunter 2017
(NdP Shawn H. Hall)

I prefer to be a dreamer among the humblest, with visions to be realized, than lord among those without dreams and desires. -Khalil Gibran

P.U Stinkenbaum
Member
Posts 388
No Fan Of Exhaust Fans

1 posted 2017-03-09 03:37 PM

It's a good poem Hunter, but who'd wanna live like that? So full of sorrow, melancholia and wretchedness.

Pass the Glade if you're going to do that here...please!

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

2 posted 2017-03-09 08:42 PM

So many great lines and so much to ponder.

Excellent poem, loved every word.

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

3 posted 2017-03-11 04:18 PM

A sad poem, JL. It's just life though, isn't it? Good read!

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

4 posted 2017-03-13 09:10 PM

nice writing...james

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

5 posted 2017-04-05 03:21 AM

Good writing.

booky1940!
Member

since 2009-04-16

Posts 136
Canada

6 posted 2017-04-05 10:53 AM

In any one's life that last goodbye must be quite dreadful to face, yet its a part of life!

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

7 posted 2017-04-05 12:25 PM

Great play on words within the body of this very good poem, JL.

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

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